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Sometimes I Feel
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Sometimes I Feel |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Sometimes I Feel Sometimes I feel like Rembrandt painting the light of life into a backdrop so dark and simple, some student could have done it for me like a red-haired cop who chalks another outline after it's too late; willing this one time to force truth out of naked blacktop and a little blood like a night bird perched too near a street light in the glaring darkness, too late to change and instinct-driven to chirp a nonexistent dawn, dreading sleepless day like a poet straining toward a meaning that he feels but cannot see, and knowing, knowing when he's dragged the last line out of his barren soul it will remain unsaid [This message has been edited by Ratleader (07-04-2003 07:52 PM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Ratleader - you are indeed a poet, a good one at that, well written... BC |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
sometimes it's like that for me too so I can relate. I feel like a child standing on a chair on tiptoe reaching for the stars only to realise too late the chair is unbalanced. Thank you for this. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
straining toward a meaning that he feels but cannot see, and knowing, knowing when he's dragged the last line out of his barren soul it will remain unsaid But it will be known... in the depths of a reader's heart. This is fantastic!!! I kept reading each verse and nodding... you have captured a poet trying to capture life, emotions, dreams... and you've done so in a vivid manner that this poet envys. *S* Beautiful work! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Sometimes I feel like that as well... A very fine write, Dear Leader of Rats!  Warm hugs, EA |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
like a red-haired cop who chalks another outline after it's too late; willing this one time to force truth out of naked blacktop and a little blood woe there friend...thats my son your talking about....hehehehehe, he's a police officer... Anyway, very intense read, enjoyed... |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
"Sometimes I feel ..." Not all thoughts need to be said ... sometimes just feeling is enough. Interesting write here dear Sir. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
A wiseman once said, sometimes you feel...like a nut, sometimes you don't. Or maybe it was just a commercial i forget, the point is..well I forget what the point is. A yes..you are a fantastic poet, a kind friend to all here,and an example of everything that is right with being a part of PIP |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
And at the end of the day.... It all remains unspoken. Yes. Nicely done Ed, |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
A true poet you are Sir~ It's your style that impresses me the most, I have to say, that class act of yours makes it hard to follow. Bravo Ed~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ought to have dedicated this one, since I wrote it as a response to one of Helen Slicker's little beauties.... /pip/Forum80/HTML/001916.html It started me thinking about what it is I'm trying to do, compared with what I DO do.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...this is so touching, it makes me want to cry and hug you at the same time.  |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
This is indeed a poignant piece of work. I am left shaking my head in awe. Patricia |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
in response to you.... ratleader...i say to thee... Thou Art A Poet thou art a poet I feel thy pain as deep as oceans floor salty as any sea love abounds like green painted across spring in colors rich in textured passion when drops drip in waxed wick’s life and ooze in melt across pages where anger flies in flame from red to blue when joy touches then your brush takes empty canvas to open windows for breezes breath and brings me close, caresses me and lets me in through words for thou art a poet |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Helen, that is beautiful, and I'm glad you posted it separately, so I could give an adequate answer without having it buried in another poem's thread. /pip/Forum80/HTML/002023.html Martie, you know the place in me that this comes from, better than anyone in PIP or out of it. I'm glad it touched you, because in many ways you're my teacher. Patricia...this transplanted Missouri boy is becoming a fan of yours too. When you moving to California, eh? Hey, Blues -- "class act" is something I read you for lessons about. Aenimal & wranx....you guys keep me sane around here, you know that? You're both on my "must read" list. Janette, that is so true....and true that sometimes you can't even write it. Hi, LeeJ -- I've often wondered what it must feel like, having to do that. The way I used it here is as close as I can come to describing.... EA 'n Bill 'n Kethry....we do have that common wall to pound our heads against, don't we? Poems are what leaks out of the cracks we make in it... Suthern, coming from someone who has virtually exploded as a poet during the past month or two, that's praise indeed! I used to aim for heads only, but like you say, hearts is where it's at. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and sometimes...its the journey and not the destination... just look where your words have led you.  (awesome write poet sir)  Well ... OK ... but you have to wash it first. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
depressing stuff here Ed but I like it, and I feel that way too sometimes. |
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