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Where We Left Us (Parts 1 and 2/Repost from an Open 23)
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Where We Left Us (Parts 1 and 2/Repost from an Open 23) |
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She Junior Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 41Wishing On A Northern Star |
Part One Night's curtains parted easily while we as two slid deftly between thin veils of light. The wind gave us wave songs as a favor to the soft step of love. You held my hands out with yours and I felt as if we were holding the ocean by its corners spreading it in front of us like a picnic blanket. I discovered that the wind startled at the caress of our hands. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Part Two Our discovery was moment by moment and on our picnic blanket ocean we dined heavily on hope. We walked on sand that scattered at our feet and it seemed as if each grain parted, politely curtsying before the air of us. I remember no words and the only way our mouths moved was to speak in a whispered lip language against one another. We were delicate and I found that our arms smiled back at oneother. "You put a stain on all of my good days." Matchbox Twenty "Disease" [This message has been edited by She (07-01-2003 03:35 AM).] |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I really love this, alot  Great write! |
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Cruina Junior Member
since 2003-07-01
Posts 16Virginia |
Wonderfully written, the imagery was powerful. I thought it was interesting that you quoted "disease," very appropriate in the context of the work. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a beauty, for sure |
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