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CaseyLeigh Junior Member
since 2003-05-15
Posts 48 |
i’ll bet my photograph lost it’s prior privilege on the desk the other night perhaps a left hand tossed it with a proper amount of disgust into an empty, idle drawer or maybe it will find it’s way over to the hibachi drifting carelessly atop cold coals doused with half a container of lighter fluid and torched in a morbid burning of bridges later, I know you will prepare a salmon filet from this same fire i am sorry to say but the lemon pepper and inevitable cocktail will not mask the bitter, lingering taste i am not proud i do not boast my casting as the villain but at the very least i am a forgettable face opposed to your favored nostalgia i don’t need to be kept on a shelf (or a desk) to collect particles of dust roused by your movement no worries your thoughts won’t be interrupted by the girl who shouldn’t know the gate code or by bare feet traipsing down your entryway to lazily knock on the door and murmur, “housekeeping” this maid has already taken the linens (never purchased) they will not clutter your life anymore |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
WOW..this is amazing.  |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
 That was great Casey! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
and here, I thought this was just about a perfect match some stories don't end the way I want them to |
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CaseyLeigh Junior Member
since 2003-05-15
Posts 48 |
yes, life does not always turn out how anyone suspects it will. people make plans, and the audience laughs. [This message has been edited by CaseyLeigh (06-27-2003 02:24 AM).] |
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Drexler_McStyles Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 195Venice, Ca |
you silly little girl.....dont you know that I dont have the foresight to burn you down...like the tower of light that shines upon those more blessed than I...instead of burning why dont you persevere youself for the coming of truth..July 6th or thereabouts?? I still love this idiocity.... david bowie record.....andy warhol Busted and Broken [This message has been edited by Ron (07-01-2003 09:07 AM).] |
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Drexler_McStyles Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 195Venice, Ca |
a sober review by Steven Doherty this is great, its unfortunate that we have to murder each other in order to churn these things out...id rather write bad poetry and live a peaceful existance with you....anyhow, I think this is the best thing you have written, it is tight, not a line is wasted and the language fits together perfectly....you need to write more....bring a pad of paper down to the boardwalk, im sure therell be plenty to inspire you.... [Signature removed - Ron] [This message has been edited by Ron (06-28-2003 01:44 PM).] |
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CaseyLeigh Junior Member
since 2003-05-15
Posts 48 |
why thank you for the compliment. that is the nicest thing you've said to me in days... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Yes, you should post a whole lot more.... this was brilliant, sadly captivating! I've been that fish out of water, raked over the coals and laid to rest. Not to mention the picture that's been tossed. oh k sara, sara. Life's a beach, but you gotta love the intermittent breeze~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Great exposition -- you took the mood and carried it, built on it all the way through. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Drexler_McStyles Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 195Venice, Ca |
I may have taken down your photo, but I still see you....in the same light as before...twilight to starlight Mr. Mean P.S. I see that one of the administartors has changed my signature to what is written below...perhaps you have children, but I am not one of them...you dont like what I say, dont read what I post.. I have a dirty mouth and little respect for others [This message has been edited by Ron (07-01-2003 09:07 AM).] |
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She Junior Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 41Wishing On A Northern Star |
I really love the language this speaks. I'm bringing it up for another round. Surely someone else will find it aftter me. "You put a stain on all of my good days." |
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Cruina Junior Member
since 2003-07-01
Posts 16Virginia |
I could relate to that very well... I liked the attention to detail, and the ending was perfect. It was a poem i had to read twice, just to make sure it was real. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I say dump him |
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Drexler_McStyles Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 195Venice, Ca |
yes, dump him. He is foul mouthed and drinks loudly. he didnt vote for G. Bush either! See you Sunday sweetheart Steven freedom of speech...dont like my music...dont listen to it |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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