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A potter's wheel in a Potter's field
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A potter's wheel in a Potter's field |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa 
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Everything seen is taken with form agreed Thundering bleak stone or insane reeds the difference between us Considering the painting of night sky with lazy orbs Reflection glints cold amongst shadowed lords the room that is within him How the fish eyes the waterbird with startled disc Muttering spear thrown at flashing risk rippling vision between them Springing forth from the rose unseen with blind unbinding Bubbling scents collide with tongue's rewinding beauty that is within her Observe the clay surrounding you as would a potter's wheel All of it belonging in a Potter's field no difference between us |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hard to pick and choose, this was all so good!! But if I must, and I must..I've picked this~ How the fish eyes the waterbird with startled disc Muttering spear thrown at flashing risk rippling vision between them Really nice writing~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I tried to do that trick of copy and paste the lines that meant the most to me.... but everything you wrote was such, a glaring intimacy I could not. There's so much I want to say but you said it all. And funny, but can we throw pots big enough to yeild our lust?? enough. I leave it up to you-- our clay dug from potter's field...  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dang...I love this |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Wow, what a hook. (I do appreciate a good hook). Can't put a finger on it, but, I see a difference in this....the write. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Brian~ I've read this a few times now, and I love it more each time...it speaks volumes. An incredible write.  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truly met the poet. ~vlraynes [This message has been edited by vlraynes (05-30-2003 02:26 AM).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
A very refined and well presented write. I like all the different parallels in each verse.......A very enjoyable read you have some great talent. Eric |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Can I have this, framed, please? gorgeous... "amongst shadowed lords the room that is within him" ...isn't that just the loveliest thing? (I happen to know, it IS.) (sneak attack-- ) |
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