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Angel In The Light
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Angel In The Light |
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poetSeaMaiden Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 107 |
~*~Angel In The Light ~*~ Thirty years, and I’m still lost Not knowing who I am. Upon this sea called “life” I’m tossed And I can’t see the land. I let the torrents pull me down Undercurrents strong I fight and flail and gasp for air Is the sea where I belong? Waves they drive me - harder - under Bubbles swirling round I’m like an angel underwater Living, but not found. The dark below, it beckons me So peaceful, yet so deep The sunrays reaching down to me My face, so warm, they’d keep. Do I swim up, or just let go To slowly disappear Into the fathoms far below Since land is what I fear. I hear my children calling me They’re waiting on the sand I must escape this tempting sea They need to hold my hand. If I’m an angel of the sea Then I must walk upright Upon the land until I’m free An angel in the light. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
A very beautiful poem of the sea.....enjoyed this, and welcome to passions.. |
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poetSeaMaiden Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 107 |
Thank you Magnus, you are the very first one to reply to my work here, and such a warm welcome! I appreciate it! This is a wonderful place.  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwwwww, this is beautiful, sweet friend, I am already becoming a huge fan of your lovely poetry because I love mermaids and dream of living near the ocean and youe wonderful words make me feel right at home, closer than hearing through a conch shell! (big hugggssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Well, there's lots of other angels loose on these pages....I think they'll all love this. ~wranx "The shortest distance between two points is.....sometimes intolerable" |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
I would like to tell you how much I liked this line by line, but I'm afraid I will annoy you, making you have to read a bunch of long replies. I will say though, that I think the world of this poem as well. I really like you using the sea as a metaphor. You have a knack for picking perfect metaphors Your imagery is intense, and oh the questioning, the feeling that you are on the edge and can go either way, I love that!Oh the part with the sunrays lighting your face deep below the surface is Especially good, and the decision to stay after seeing the image of your children upon the sand, wonderful. This is my favorite poem of yours in the sense that it offers hope at the end. Not an answer, but a willingness to struggle on until you find one. And that is a profound message. Oh you rock!!! Keep writing, I assure you I will keep reading ~Hugs~ Mike P.S.-Hesitate to say this, cause I don't normally like to do this, but if you would like to talk about these feelings you are having or anything else, with someone who struggles on as well, don't hesitate to E-Mail me. Ok, now that I've made a fool out of myself, I will leave you alone. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Absolutely beautiful yet so very sad. I could relate very well to your words and I hope your have found the light that enables you to stay afloat. "Love is the lifeline I cling to when grief threatens to pull me down into eternal darkness" Take care........Sue I am in motion |
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poetSeaMaiden Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 107 |
Noah - Thanks BUNCHES from one mermaid fan to another! I think I used to be one in another lifetime or something. It just seems to "fit" so I go with it! LOL Wranx - Coming from someone of your caliber, I am humbled by your compliment! Thanks for taking the time to read. MikeFessel -  First let me say, that your comments will NEVER annoy me - you are so funny! I appreciate each and every one! It does me well to know what others like in my writing and style. I am one of the most patient mermaids around, so don't ever worry about annoying me.  It's an honor to have others read, as you well know. And just between you and me, you have not made a fool of yourself, ok? I'm really not as depressed all the time as these pieces make me sound - but if I ever find myself drowning, I will certainly flag you down. You're so nice, you just can't be real!  ~ Poets cry with words, not always tears, you see. ~ PoetSeaMaiden |
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poetSeaMaiden Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 107 |
Sorry Sue - you slipped in on me! Thanks for taking the time to read - as you know, I'm a fan of yours already! |
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Lisann Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 350 |
very beautiful. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I'm having difficulty even forming a reply because I have been so moved by this poem. It is beautifully written and near moved me to tears with the depth of the emotions you have expressed! Warm hugs, EA |
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MikeFessel Member
since 2003-04-19
Posts 321Brooklyn, NYC, USA |
LOL I am not that nice, I guess I just seem like it when I am around wonderful people like you. Rubs off on me I guess Sorry to bug you again, but I can never help myself. I must bug people MikeP.S.- Oh, yes any time you want to E-Mail me, feel free. Hope you won't get into a dark place like that, oh no, but if you do... |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
The sea of the soul so vividly told. Beautiful. Eric |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Absolutely beautiful....We are ever changing as the sea so do we really ever know who we are...your words and heart make you an angel to your children and others...what a wonderful thing to be...for you bless all you touch...**hugs**keep up the good work.. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Excellent -- how did I miss this? ...and it reminds me a bit of one of mine, an angel thrown into an alien place... /pip/Forum64/HTML/003079.html ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
what a beautiful write! happy to have you here, poetSeamaiden |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I've been lost too...so it's good that we can be lost together. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
poetSeaMaiden - swim up, never down. My best to you... BC |
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