»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #26
»
Rita's Kitchen
| Open Poetry #26 |
|
Rita's Kitchen |
|
|
Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I would’ve ordered dessert but I figured she’d think I was showing off, so I paid my check and left Jean a twenty under the plate of chicken bones, just for making me smile. I was nearly out the door when I heard her call behind me. She was fanning herself with the twenty and talking, just as slow and sweet as she could, ‘Know what I could use more than this hon?’ I grinned, feeling my face redden and matched her drawl, drip for honey drip, ‘What’s that darlin?’ ‘A dishwasher’, she smiled, like she was offering me a get out of jail free card. Not seeming to notice my face drop, she began talking faster and I realized that the place was filling up with hungry locals. ‘I’d just need ya for tonight sweetie, Merle walked out, the old drunk, and the new boy can’t handle a Sunday night by himself yet. You’ll be fine, he’s a real nice boy, he’ll help ya work the machines an all.’ She pressed the twenty into my hand as she lead me towards the kitchen. I looked back into the dining room with a stab of panic, for some way of escape but only noted the guy she’d called Buddy, laughing to himself. He seemed to be getting quite a kick out of me today. |
||
| © Copyright 2003 Duncan - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
That's telling a mighty fine story! Oh Duncan, you did good! Now get to work, it's only one night just think, she might hire you on full time if you're 'really good'  |
||
|
ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
This was awesome! So colorful, could see the checkered table cloths. TD |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
whoa....... How did ya write this soooo fast? someone steal your ICE BOX???  the moth will be back yayaya |
||
Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling)... well, well.... only one night to write a sequel. Is that some sort of record for you Dunc? Like the shortest time to write a poem or the quickest you mind kicked into gear after writing a poem? LMAO Rememebr folks.. Send you blank paper to Duncan and save the corners of books all over the world... Good stuff bud... I posted mine just a few minutes ago... so you are up again... |
||
|
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Duncan, And so did I get quite a kick out of you today. I like the waves you stir. |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
TAG, Ron's IT! |
||
|
Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"‘A dishwasher’, she smiled, like she was offering me a get out of jail free card." Sometimes you make me laugh right out loud Duncan.. This is excellent.... Off to read the Captains installment. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
like she was offering me a get out of jail free card. ============================== could that line of analogy be any cooler? but only noted the guy she’d called Buddy, laughing to himself. He seemed to be getting quite a kick out of me today. ======================= hes not the only one So..... ready to get it up again? LMAO I MEAN YOUR PEN!!! get it out of the gutter... sheesh  |
||
|
Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wonderful!!! I really enjoyed this - do I see a duet in the future here? |
||
|
regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Duncan, Super imagery, fun to watch you build this character...enjoyed; I'll go see the next chapter of capt. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
||
|
A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
And with a southern twang that would melt butter, she glanced back over her shoulder and said, "jes follow darlin"..... and all he could do was tag along behind her like a puppy.... loved this Duncan, thanks for the smile. ever deep...runs |
||
|
scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Keep going Duncan...you've got us hooked now.. believe in what your heart feels... |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
