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Open Poetry #26

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Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

0 posted 2003-04-16 05:47 PM

Penance

Forty dried pinto beans counted
into a wooden bowl,
each one a day of atonement
tied to sustenance.

He’ll need warmth the secular women bring -
firewood at dusk and dawn

and the things they do
with charmed tongues
encourages smoke
to reverse from his chimney
a dirty cleansing stokes the body
while the spirit forges a different story
to tell God.

Later, he’ll ask to be whipped
with torn clothing –
altar rags and rough wool,
and they’ll comply,
humming as they go,
tunes of heresy.

© 2003 Core

[This message has been edited by Corinne (04-16-2003 05:52 PM).]

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

1 posted 2003-04-16 09:09 PM

Powerful imagery, Corinne. Much enjoyed.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

2 posted 2003-04-16 09:10 PM

Enjoyed the read of this

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

3 posted 2003-04-17 11:16 AM

Thanks Lone Wolf and White Rose.

Cor

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2003-04-17 12:24 PM

(chuckling).. perhaps the cynic in me... but this I find in some ways amusing...

strong images here Cor... and it would seem an indictment....

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2003-04-17 01:11 PM

Cor,
A strong write, enjoyed.

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