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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

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0 posted 2003-05-09 03:24 PM

Certain songs are ruined now--
all the ones we sang.
Turned into the lie of "us,"
they haunt in reprimand.

Certain smells now hurt like hell--
fresh-cut grass can wound.
Promises unkept from us
refrain the worn-out tune.

Christmas trees are loneliness.
New Year's Eves are memory
of every time I looked for you
and died my lonely death.

The ease of our comaraderie
is replaced by our disgust.
The family dog now growls at you--
she senses my mistrust.

The smile I paint upon my face
is nothing more than mockery.
Can't you see? Can't you see?
There is nothing left of us.

So open up the casket now.
Say a eulogy.
Gaze upon the face of love--
ash to ash and trust to dust.

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (05-09-2003 03:38 PM).]

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2003-05-09 03:27 PM

I know a moth who is going to flit in
and say "ya done good, girl..."

but I'm beating her to it.

...ash to ash, and trust to dust...

IWIHWT...

Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

2 posted 2003-05-09 03:48 PM

surge of emotion..does that even sound right?..I dunno we all know I'm not good at this commenting thing, but this comes to mind..for real? I don't know I don't want to assume that this is one of those life experiences or what? sorry I'm just really lacking on my communication skills here...but if it is..

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2003-05-09 03:55 PM

As always, excellent write...

"The family dog now growls at you--
she senses my mistrust."

That part made me laugh. I would have loved for my dog to growl at my ex...lol..or take a leg off....I know....

Susan C.

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

4 posted 2003-05-09 04:03 PM

serenity blaze - you speak of this well, I can feel these thoughts of you...

BC

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

5 posted 2003-05-09 06:10 PM

K:

so YOU were the one who wrote my wedding vows
hmmm . . . no wonder

you know I know this
and quite sad but true
amazing Lady K
xxoo

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

6 posted 2003-05-09 06:18 PM

smile...

Thanks, I think...grin..

and susan? about that dog...

yeah, I laugh every time the bitch growls at him too.

Hugs for all who know.

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

7 posted 2003-05-09 06:27 PM

Amen.

passing shadows
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displaced

8 posted 2003-05-09 07:01 PM

that hurts

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

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9 posted 2003-05-09 08:01 PM

(yktiktykik)

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

10 posted 2003-05-12 12:24 PM

I'm glad that you're listening. . . because I'm hearing. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

11 posted 2003-05-12 01:43 PM

What Janet Marie said.

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

12 posted 2003-05-12 01:55 PM

Love your wry (or is that "rye") sense of humor!
"a dirge for matrimony"--You're too much! lol
Loved it!

Warm hugs,
EA

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

13 posted 2003-05-12 02:21 PM

This should be kept in card form to be flashed by those who have to suffer through relatives asking "When are YOU going to get married?"

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

14 posted 2003-05-12 08:56 PM

serenity blaze - you said it so well that I won't even comment any further. The bayou, wonder what it's like there?

BC

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

15 posted 2003-05-13 03:21 PM

Christmas trees are loneliness.
New Year's Eves are memory
of every time I looked for you
and died my lonely death.

Oh... my... lord... How did you capture 8 years in just 4 lines? Maybe I needed a dog... he kept the cat.

ash to ash and trust to dust

Could anyone ever write it better?

Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

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Georgia

16 posted 2003-05-13 05:03 PM

awesome piece. Very true so very true

icebox
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

17 posted 2003-05-13 07:30 PM

I always thought matrimony needed a dirge. In what other supposedly positive social relationship is success measured by the death of one of the participants?

brian sites
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since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

18 posted 2003-05-13 09:14 PM

you can't plead

SEE?

hard enough

there are no eyes there
only holes

hug you

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