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Martie
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0 posted 2003-05-07 09:45 PM


Somersault In Time

Prose rendition of same story is here: /pip/Forum15/HTML/001775.html

The daughter held a pink satin slip.
The kindly nurse had said,
go home,
get some sleep,
but she couldn’t sleep.

When was it they had reversed roles?

Wandering around her mother’s bedroom,
she touched bottles and jars,
even smelled the scent
of her mother’s hair in a brush
on the dressing table.

As she rubbed the soft
material of the slip
she remembered her
in front of the open window,
writing her memoirs,
the room like ice.

Worried then,
in this shingle-sided house of her youth,
for her mother
who was just looking out.

Slip to face,
caught in a faint hint
of Nivia skin lotion
and floral fragrance
of old sachet,
she breathed,

glanced at the chair,
empty,
then saw the notebook
that lay on the floor.

She picked it up
and opened it to the first page.

As the silk slip fell from her lap
She read,

"Just Meandering-A Memoir


It’s funny how things turn
around and around--the world,
the seasons, life and death.

What was, is again.

In a somersault of time,
she is like a mother to me now."

------
3-8-01


[This message has been edited by Martie (05-07-2003 10:24 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-05-07 09:48 PM


Breathtaking...filled with such incredible emotion that I wept...Thank you, so much, for sharing it with me....

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2 posted 2003-05-07 09:50 PM


Martie sweet lady, as the song goes, "all my life's a circle....sunrise and sundown." This is exquisite. hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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3 posted 2003-05-07 10:05 PM


Worried then,
in this shingle-sided house of her youth,
for her mother
who was just looking out.

Oh Martie, this is like a slide show,
where time passes in slow motion.

Thank you for writing and sharing the deep seeded tenderness that lives within your heart.

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4 posted 2003-05-07 11:12 PM


If you guys think this is beautiful...(and it is indeed so)
go read the prose......
ya just GOTTA read Martie when shes in her long winded pen

she rocks!!

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5 posted 2003-05-07 11:34 PM




(big hugggssssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, this too felt like a somersault to me reading as your golden heart takes us through a photo album of loving images! (kiss on cheek) I truly think our children teach us too and can be our mothers and fathers too on occasion, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Underneath your clothes, there's an endless story

***Shakira***

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6 posted 2003-05-07 11:48 PM


Again Martie's magic touch, adding her special essence to something that's already meaningful, to make it something so deep and, well, magnificent.

Thank you for sharing.

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7 posted 2003-05-08 10:12 AM


Yes, I know you know...
and yes...

the scents remain...

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8 posted 2003-05-08 10:44 AM


I love when you do this.

Someday? when I am a teacher?

I would love to teach your work, as an example of HOW you can express yourself.

this is lovely, Martie.

But then, no way it could miss...


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9 posted 2003-05-08 11:20 AM


Exquisite Martie!

..what is very sad is when the scent finally leaves....and you just can't get it back.

Thank you for this..may I have a tissue please?
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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10 posted 2003-05-08 11:20 AM


Martie
Nice always enjoy your writing,

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11 posted 2003-05-08 11:40 AM


MartieSis~
You took my heart on a somersault-of-remember~
touching ... just so touching
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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12 posted 2003-05-08 10:29 PM


Martie - such special words and what a journey you take us on.  So much emotion and such deep feelings - you are truly something special - Paul
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13 posted 2003-05-09 04:43 AM


you are truly awesome!
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14 posted 2003-05-09 06:37 AM


It’s funny how things turn
around and around--the world,
the seasons, life and death.

What was, is again.
---------------------
Perfect!! I loved this, also read the prose version (first).
Luv, Liz xxxxx

"Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~

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15 posted 2003-05-09 07:00 AM




Martie,

Just beautiful...how wonderful for all of us,  you share your fantastic gift of writing expressively of love and wisdom, through imagery, in poetry and in prose.

Thank you,

Hugs and love, Pat



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16 posted 2003-05-09 09:31 AM


The many stages of humankind... 'Tis the way of life - and you've penned it beautifully, of course...
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17 posted 2003-05-10 01:36 AM


You know I am a sucker for poems that even
hint of time....and this was no exception.
I felt like I was there in that room...

Thanx dear one...

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18 posted 2003-05-10 07:30 AM


OK, that got me.  Now I have to pick up all these shattered chunks of my mind.
You are an amazing writer.  Thank you.

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19 posted 2003-05-10 09:20 AM


enjoyed
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20 posted 2003-05-10 09:25 AM


Your words always pull me right into the scene. Excellent, as always, Martie.
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