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0 posted 2003-01-24 05:36 AM




A Maze Of Blues



Betrayed and bitter
Love should never hurt this much
Used and so abused
Emotional maze of fear
Shades of a broken, blue heart.



~ The soul lies buried in ink that does not flow ~
           

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1 posted 2003-01-24 06:54 AM



Tanka, Mysteria.
It's good to see you writing again...
welcome home!

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2 posted 2003-01-24 07:04 AM


A lovely acrostic, my friend. You've captured the blues with colourful style ... much enjoyed!

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit

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3 posted 2003-01-24 07:20 AM


Always enjoy your posts
And can always count on your blending
The correct image and words
Great acrostic

Gloom

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4 posted 2003-01-24 07:39 AM




well put, and ooch! i feel the sting of betrayal as it pours off the page

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5 posted 2003-01-24 08:07 AM


A wonderful colourful portrayal
of heart betrayal
Hope
I can ralate to the words you choose
feeling heartbroken when I lost my muse

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6 posted 2003-01-24 08:13 AM


I like them Acrostic thinggies!!....

A crostic is a poem form
C ontaining a device
R hyming's not essential, no it
O nly makes it nice
S ometimes it is difficult
T o write acrostic muse
I t took a lot of patience
C omposing this for youse.

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7 posted 2003-01-24 08:56 AM


I enjoyed this lovely and a-mazing poem - I liked Toe's response too...
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8 posted 2003-01-24 09:15 AM






(big hugggsssssssss) Oh Sharon, this is so very sad, I know this feeling too because on New Years my heart was broken and now I feel better after my Joanna talked to me again but I still will never get to love her and she was very special to me! (sad sigh) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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9 posted 2003-01-24 09:18 AM


Very nice acrostic tanka Sharon..
much enjoyed!
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

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10 posted 2003-01-24 10:01 AM


This is a wonderful acrostic/tanka, Sharon.
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11 posted 2003-01-24 12:38 PM


      Now that is hilarious!  See what no sleep will do to you?  I was trying to do someting for the ladies that are "just blue" and didn't even realize I did a tanka too, so tanka you!  

Glad you enjoyed the "two for the price of one deal"    

Toe ~ You you!  Cute, very cute!

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12 posted 2003-01-24 03:11 PM


geez!!! this is sad, depressing. painful stuff here!
*whatsatanka?* lol

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13 posted 2003-01-24 03:37 PM


Sharon...thanks for commiserating with my blue...hugs you!
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14 posted 2003-01-24 09:44 PM


Passing Shadows - don't feel bad I never knew one until I met one either LOL ... A Tanka is Japanese poetry and usually done in 5, 7. 5, 7, 7 and a Haiku is just the 5, 7, 5 (like the word "suppose" is 2 counts, and "alligator" is 4, see?  He he, and I never met a tanka I didn't like either.

Martie - I shall sing you a song of blue, if you play that piano of yours?

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