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Poet4Christ Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 211Oklahoma City |
So Much More I cry out for your strength and peace for I could be so much more When she finds herself weary and without release Why shouldn't I give her more Lord forgive my tired feet and struggling mind Help me give support and rest and honor her I cry out for your love and comfort for I could be so much more My shoulders could be her place to hide Why shouldn't I hold her up Lord forgive my attention so absent and denied Help me listen and retain and honor her I cry out for your will and truth for I could be so much more Together we come to you in prayer Why shouldn't I lead her there Lord forgive my roles neglected and devided Help me take us to your door and honor her Desperately falling I cry out to your giving spirit Lord help me honor her Timothy Work 2003 I know this poem is very simply written but I was compelled to write it that way. I hope everyone will still like it. I may actually revise it, I haven't decided. Should questions in poems have a question mark at the end? I am not much of a puncuation or rule watcher when it comes to poetry, so I could use some insight. Thanx - Tim He that trusteth in his own heart is a fool: but whoso walketh wisely, he shall be delivered. Proverbs 28:26 |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Nice to find you here Tim and your poem -prayer is very appealing. As to punctuation, some poets leave it out for effectivness. I personally like to see punctuated sentences. A matter of choice. Love, Joyce |
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SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
What a sweet, and honorable thing you wrote about. Very nice to read!!!! So full of heart.  Love, Terri~  |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
I always enjoyed poems which ask questions/a plea for response. It adds anticipation to the end of the poem. Nice write. poe If nothing is something |
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earthdust Member
since 2003-10-28
Posts 53predestined and foreknown |
that was deeply touching, oh so deeply touching, with this i can truly relate. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
A very heartfelt write indeed Tim, and I have always been partial to using the punctuation, for I think it makes a person do a quick stop to think about a question, and isn't that a good thing  |
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whispering wind Junior Member
since 2003-08-18
Posts 45 |
You can tell you put your heart into this poem and it makes the reader get more into the poem because of it. You said it was simple and you hope we still like it.. well I believe that simplicity can mean so much more than something elaborate. A simple smile can change a persons mood and I thank you for bringing a smile to my face with this poem. Wonderful job. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
sometimes we need to be simple.. and we realise we are simple, as we stand humbly before God's throne. For HE, is amazing I like this alot. Always God's Girl, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssssss) Oh Timothy, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I too believe punctuation should only be used if a poet feels it is right, but should NEVER be forced in poetry! (sigh) No matter which form you write in, your poetry is always spiritually pure, yay, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Timothy, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth I can see the sun set and I perceive ***Live*** [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (11-01-2003 12:29 AM).] |
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