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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2002-10-20 03:43 PM



    



Autumnal Enrapture

In coat of leaves
the park bench was buried
as the gray squirrel
scampered and scurried.
With gentle sweeping
of my hand
oh so softly
how they did land
upon the dampness
of earthen bed
where they now rested
their weary head.
This was where
they were intended to be
covering the ground,
beneath Autumn trees.
I sat in amaze
looking out over yon lake
water lapping the beach
in symphony did break
as the sun shone,
a brightening of all
those many splendid colors held
within the fall.
I thought of the leaves
that fell to the ground
held in the beauty of
their gentle surround,
of how they began life of their own
as nothing more than mere seed
nourished by sun and life
upon which they did feed.
Carried and blown upon the winds
of life unseen
then turning into a mountain
of vivid green.
When the season of summer
fades into gone
comes the passing of cycles
into the dawn.
As foliage turns into pallets
of tawny hue
brings with it the splendor
of Autumns’ view.
The wind in soft moan
blew through the trees
whispering the tales of
life’s mysteries.
It told of how life’s circle
is complete
as each season fades
into retreat.
I pondered how just
one simple seed
could birth into
leaf of tree
that would fade away
with the passing of time
into such beauty
of delightful divine.
The splendor of the fall
hung amidst the trees
while visions of life
enraptured me.


I am open to suggestions for a title??


If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream...

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (10-20-2002 03:56 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-10-20 03:53 PM




(smiles) Oh my gosh, I just love this, sweet friend, this is breathtaking, may autumnns seeds prinkle upon all our hearts this season and supply us with the harvest we all hold dear! (kiss on cheek) This is delightful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

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2 posted 2002-10-20 04:22 PM


Simply beautiful Donna!
And...I think the title is perfect!
Very very lovely piece...
~Hugs sweet poetess~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
  So you won't ever forget me ~

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3 posted 2002-10-20 04:55 PM


This was a nice read for a lazy Sunday.

Contemplative, yet relaxing at same time.  Enjoyed!

Title is okay to me...

Thanks,
Pat

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4 posted 2002-10-20 05:54 PM


GentleSpirit~
You 'know' I'm a title fan ... and believe me -
it's  P E R F E C T ~

The entire piece speaks so lovingly of your poetic spirit~
I adore it~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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Gentle Spirit
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5 posted 2002-10-20 06:00 PM


Noah thank you for your sweet reply!  Hugs to you.
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6 posted 2002-10-20 06:02 PM


Nancy I didn't want the ordinary Autumn title but really didn't know if this worked or not.  Thanks for reading hon. Hugs.
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7 posted 2002-10-20 06:03 PM


Pat it is odd just how much one can contemplate when alone with ones self. Thank you.  
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8 posted 2002-10-20 06:04 PM


Marge I surely do thank you for the perfect comment and for taking the time to listen to my autumn song so to speak.  Hugs to you dear lady.
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9 posted 2002-10-20 06:05 PM


Donna, as you know by now, I'm not speechless very often. But now I am. I can't seem to think of the words to express how beautiful this is. I love all of it. Thank you, sweet lady.
Love To All,
Ethel

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10 posted 2002-10-20 06:06 PM


Ethel, your words touch me deeply and I do thank you for that lovely comment.  Hugs.
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11 posted 2002-10-20 06:33 PM


Gentle Spirit...I think your title is exquisite and your poem is rapturous. Love the way you wove the seasons into this piece.
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12 posted 2002-10-20 08:58 PM



A wonderful everything...title, picture, poem!  Thanks for the E!

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13 posted 2002-10-20 09:13 PM


Donna, you expressed your appreciation of nature so eloquently and so vividly.

A joy to behold!

Linda

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14 posted 2002-10-21 07:06 PM


Ivy Rose thank you and I am so glad you enjoyed the tapestry.

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15 posted 2002-10-21 07:08 PM


Karilea  
thank you for your suggestion too which was so beautiful
that I am half tempted to change this title yet.  THANK YOU for putting
up with my e's.  HUGS

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16 posted 2002-10-21 07:08 PM



Linda there is so much to be seen within nature and I am pleased that you
enjoyed this.  Hugs to you.

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17 posted 2002-10-22 08:46 PM


WOWIE!!!!!!!!!! oooo i liked dis one!! yessum!!!

You can close your eyes to things you dont want to see,but u cant close your heart to things you dont want to feel.

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18 posted 2002-10-22 08:57 PM


"Autumnal Enrapture" works for me....stirring images in this piece...well crafted to flow like leaves drifting down in the breeze...this is wonderful write.

...believe what your heart feels...

[This message has been edited by scorpio (10-22-2002 09:00 PM).]

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19 posted 2002-10-22 09:44 PM


Donna - oooh, this is simply beautiful. Enjoyed thoroughly. Chris

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20 posted 2002-10-22 10:13 PM


Gorgeous, Donna! *hugs*

The stars will shine when I am gone,
the earth will turn on as before,
the gulls, still race along the shore,
the morning star, still kiss the dawn

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21 posted 2002-10-23 01:27 PM


Exquisite writing!
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22 posted 2002-10-23 02:25 PM


Stac, thanks so much and You know how much it means to me.  HUGS

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23 posted 2002-10-23 02:25 PM


Scorpio, thank you for such a beautiful poetic reply, it is much appreciated!
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24 posted 2002-10-23 02:27 PM


Chris, thanks for the beautiful hon!  You are so appreciated.  HUGS YOU!

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25 posted 2002-10-23 02:27 PM


Michael, my friend you are a treasure.  Thank you.
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26 posted 2002-10-23 02:28 PM


SE, thank you so much.  That was lovely of you!
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