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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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wound up weeping kept her from reaching sleep but she was too tired to cry so she stood under the water’s spray until it turned cold and embellished until you would almost think her pretty except for the leaking from her eyes keys in hand she set off and let exhaustion take her softly she sobbed her way to the place where she is paid not to be... [This message has been edited by jellybeans (11-08-2002 01:58 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
I like this poem. Enjoyed the read. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Yup... can't go dragging 'round that place or they'll be nagging... and one more echo bouncing around in your head's just what you don't need. *S* Just check all your problems at the door You've sold your soul, can't worry more Until the clock gives you reprieve From one hell to another when time to leave. I like this very much, lady... even if I don't like the merry-go-round. *S* |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Jellybeans, I like the way you wrote the poem, but I don't like to have the feeling you were writing about. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
some times..the days are just that way.. (smiling) you have captured it all too well... usually only done when one has first hand experience.. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
...sigh now who has a bed?...a pillow is optional...no...make that anywhere semi-soft.... never mind........a desk seems to be just fine right about now.......zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz thank you all  |
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Contabo Member
since 2001-11-21
Posts 159 |
Goodness... It has been such a long dry spell for me. This wets my whistle and takes my breath away. Thank you jellybeans. Contabo |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
You have given the reader the emotions felt...and many have been there, I am sure. *s M |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Enjoyed this poem. Thank you for sharing. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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