Pantoum-Emmett--2nd try at the form

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Open Poetry #23

Pantoum-Emmett--2nd try at the form

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2002-11-08 09:19 AM

                             This second one didn't turn out nearly as good as I'd have liked. Maybe I'll
                             work more on it. Somehow incorporate "World's greatest clown."

                             Emmett

                             he wept and frowned
                             to make us smile
                             in tears he drowned
                             in jester’s wile

                             big feet, big pants
                             to make us smile
                             with raves and rants
                             in jester’s wile

                             carnation squirts
                             big feet, big pants
                             sprayed seltzer squirts
                             with raves and rants

                             carnation squirts
                             in tears he drowned
                             sprayed seltzer squirts
                             he wept and frowned

                             ©November 7, 2002

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2002-11-08 09:26 AM

VAS,
Well done enjoyed. I like your sad humor.

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

2 posted 2002-11-08 11:05 AM

Sad poem but funny at the same time. I like it.

Cold hands means a warm heart

NewEnglandlazurlu
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-01-04

Posts 7470
A Mountain Paradise

3 posted 2002-11-08 03:57 PM

Virginia, nice job on this poem.

I remember meeting him when I was a little girl
and although clowns are supposed to make you laugh,
he scared the daylights out of me.

Hugs, Marti

"I am not afraid of STORMS
for I have learned how to sail my
SHIP." Louisa May Alcott

(I'm not changing this for anyone)

[This message has been edited by NewEnglandlazurlu (11-08-2002 03:59 PM).]

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2002-11-08 04:05 PM

It amazes me how you talented poets can write such excellent poems on any subject. I enjoy all of them.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

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