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WhiteRose
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0 posted 2002-11-06 10:34 AM



Gray stone statues
representation of life
sand blasted by wind
now almost white
with no indentation
where name and life inscribed,
dark of thought now slips
clear of feel subsides,
as death walks the rows
of the country cemetary
and the musings of mind
are at once extraordinary.
But they be musings that die
there behind the fence
for in the light of life
they don't even make sense.

WhiteRose
(weird I know)

"my reflection becomes me"

© Copyright 2002 Anne Thompson - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-11-06 11:34 AM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Anne, I don't think its weird, for poetry is meant to be a fascinating language, and such wonderful depths are spoken here! (kiss on cheek) I believe even when a poet dies, the spirit, the muse, the essence always lives on and feeds the soil as the epitaphs written on the stone are his or her words forever to be spoken! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Anne, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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2 posted 2002-11-06 11:50 AM


another pastoral piece from you.

the initial description of the gravestones is such that it almost feels like a description of the sentinals on Easter Island. it gives a hint of intrigue to the piece.

i would suggest however that you try to re-work it into some simple form, just to help tie it together some. the awkwardness of the present form takes away from the spell of the piece.

Earth Angel
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3 posted 2002-11-06 01:04 PM


No, not weird, sombre, yes, but not weird.
V-e-r-y  i-n-t-e-r-e-s-t-i-n-g.....

EA

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4 posted 2002-11-06 09:52 PM


Thank you Noah, you are always so kind with your words.

majnu, my dear friend, who knows what I was thinking when I wrote this one huh? Thank you for reading, and for responding.

Linda, so that is what they are calling weird now?

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