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Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 2002-11-03 06:44 PM

The funeral is at two p.m.,
...my bus leaves town at eight,
Tomorrow seems a life gone by,
...there goes the midnight freight.
Ten years have passed since I've been back,
...I've felt the need to roam,
From Wichita to San Antone,
...no place to call a home.
Neon lights from down the street,
...dance against the wall,
Six long hours til break of dawn,
...no need for wake up call.
I lay awake in silent wait,
...cockroaches on the wall,
Scurry 'cross my long agoes,
...strangers walk the hall.
She was the bane of my existence,
...the drier of my tears,
She took my hand and led the way,
...the slayer of my fears,
Foster mothers come and go,
...she was but five feet tall,
Child welfare is an oxymoron,
...raindrops start to fall.
I count the drips from ceiling's crack,
...the night returns my fears,
She promised me she'd never leave,
...no one to catch my tears.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

1 posted 2002-11-03 07:01 PM

As I've told you before, Tim, I am a big fan of your writing and this piece was no exception. If this is a true personal story, my heart goes out to you for all the hardships you have experienced in your life. It seems to me that the greater the writer, the more they have experienced ---whether it be good or bad. It all goes into that well from which we draw the ink to write.

EA

[This message has been edited by Earth Angel (11-03-2002 09:20 PM).]

SeanD
Junior Member

since 2002-11-02

Posts 12

2 posted 2002-11-03 07:05 PM

i must say i love this peice. outstanding work. I had this feeling take over my body as i read it and at the end, felt so incredible that i could feel your pain. Amazing.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-11-03 07:30 PM

You caught me off guard, Sir...
so did the raindrops...

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2002-11-03 07:49 PM

Child welfare is an oxymoron,
...raindrops start to fall.
I count the drips from ceiling's crack,
...the night returns my fears,
She promised me she'd never leave,
...no one to catch my tears.
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that line hits with such truthful impact...
this just aches off the page...powerful write poet sir..as always your work commands respect..no matter what the topic.
jm

Unknown to us, there are moments when crevices open for time to come alive with begining.

John O'Donohue
Conamara Blues

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

5 posted 2002-11-03 07:59 PM

Tim, this poem had such a powerful effect on me
that I wanted to see more of your work. I haven't
seen much of it since I've been here at PIP.
You, dear Sir, are a very talented poet. No matter
what your subject, you write it with such force
and power. Thank you for sharing your work.

Love makes the world go 'round (unkown)
with love and hugs from Ethel

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2002-11-03 08:07 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Tim, this is so very sad, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and hope that is in the past and now you have a shoulder to cry over and if you don't, my heart goes out to you and know we are all here for you and promises will come your way! (sigh) This is touching, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tim, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

7 posted 2002-11-03 09:50 PM

This is utterly touching, every descriptive line... held me spellbound until the wonderful, (though, so sad it made me cry), ending. A great poem.

Thank you so much for sharing it,

With Warm Regards,
Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

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