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Fallen (REVISED)
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Fallen (REVISED) |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA 
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This one is pretty self explanitory... It's a song... I wrote it today during English, let me know what you think. FALLEN For the first time in my life I have fallen hard And I don’t want to get up again And now I know the truth You’re the one for me My life will soon begin I’ve spent my last day alone I’ve got you here with me Nothing can take us apart I’ve dreamt of this so long I knew this day would come You’re forever in my heart (Because I’ve) (Chorus) Fallen… Fallen for you I know we’re meant to be Fallen to my knee Asking you to be with me (You have) Fallen from the sky You’re my angel, you see When you left town that day I knew life wouldn’t be the same But there was nothing I could do Every day you’re on my mind Wishing you were by my side Every dream I dream of you Chorus (Bridge) But until the day That we’re together again I’ll keep you in my thoughts And let forever begin Chorus x2 - Cody - Note To Self: If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!! If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid? [This message has been edited by CwboyAtHeart (12-11-2002 06:42 PM).] |
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rxyfxy04 Member
since 2002-11-26
Posts 54lil' town in Virginia |
OMG!! i love it. That is really sweet! definitly coming from a guy. And if it is true.. i hope everything will work out for ya!! RxyFxy04 |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
That was a really beautiful song! I really don't know what else I could say, because I already said it!  WinterWren |
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Rainbowdust Member
since 2002-12-05
Posts 320Sydney, Australia |
I liked the chorus best.. thought the verses could have been a bit more.. original? I liked the play on the word Fallen especially, how you related it both to yourself and her. Do you write music too, or just the lyrics? Cos I could already kinda hear it in my head! Probably just me though hehe... The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears. |
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wvplayernotreally Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 215yakima wa |
**sniff, siff** that was a great song! haha sorry i didn't read it before lol i am slow! good job! i liked it alot! " I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking." |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
*Hands out tissues* Aww! This was very sweet, not to mention beautifully written. I, too, can already sing it in my mind. You did a very good job here and I hope you keep it up. ~Sky "Whatever life brings, I've been through everything, but now I'm on my knees again" -Creed |
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Avis Junior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 38Raleigh, NC, USA |
Very nice! I write the lyrics and the music for my songs too. Also like you, I write them in school. Haha! (When I'm not sleeping that is) and I'm known for carrying around my rhyming dictionary and my poetry notebook. Thanks for sharing! Do you sing too, because that's what I do. Nice to see another dude who does what I do. You can email me at lemonlover101@hotmail.com and keep up the good work! Peace and Love, |
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ShadyMakaveli Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 128 |
I personally loved it, had a good message one that's easily relatable, a very good write i would love the hear it as a song. |
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CloudedDreams Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 210My Fantasy Realm |
Man, I hate it when i reply late, everyone just took the words out of my mouth!!! Anyway, good job and I hope that one day it will be transformed into music Yes there will be tommorrow, but will you be there to greet it? |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
this is so lovely. I wish I write like that...what is bridge anyway? email me the answer please. Maybe I am not praying...but I know... |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Cody~ Wow...I am truly impressed. This is absolutely beautiful, and so well expressed. I LOVE this...VERY nicely done. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Awww I would absolutely love to take that one to my guitar Beautifully done, Cody, you still have your way with words |
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