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Zengo
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0 posted 2002-12-06 03:43 AM


She was nothing I had hoped for,
Nothing I had dreamed of,
But everything I had wanted,
Those sleepless nights,
Thinking about,
That slight glimmer in her eyes,
As they slowly focused into mine,
The pathway to the soul,
A split second of perfection,
A drive to live,
And living for that moment,
As my vision is clear,
I can see her thoughts,
As well hers to mine,
The sudden warmth,
As I feel her touch,
Wrapping my arms around her,
Meet instantly with her's,
Then the blissful smell,
Of her,
Those long hugs,
Where we both refused to let go,
For it was true............
I dream........of one more......long hug.......

© Copyright 2002 Nicholas Wright - All Rights Reserved
Jenn Cirrincione
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1 posted 2002-12-06 09:52 AM


Breathtaking. Really.
Usually love poems are nice, but empty almost...and just kind of flat and cliche. But this one was different and it was very good. I wish you the best.

Jenn

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Jaime
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2 posted 2002-12-06 10:41 AM


I second Jenn about love poems normally lacking sincerity and depth. At first I thought, Can I Really stomach another love poem? But your peom was surprisingly refreshing.

Thanks for posting.

Jaime

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WinterWren
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3 posted 2002-12-06 12:30 PM


Wow that was really good. I especially liked the opening lines. Awesome really. I'll be looking for more of yours.
Laugh often, love much, live well.

WinterWren
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Zengo
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4 posted 2002-12-11 01:13 AM


Thanks for all the kind words!

Nick

vlraynes
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5 posted 2002-12-11 02:29 AM



Zengo~
I have to agree with the others.
This is a wonderful change from the 'norm' and
it reads with such sincerity and love.
Very nicely done.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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