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Her Secret
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Her Secret |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
It's been awhile guys and gals.Hope at least someone remembers me... Her Secret- She sits alone, unheard red lightning in her eyes damp streaks of his love roll gently down her check. (I know it's not right) faint luminescence from the sky above illuminates the void within ragged and torn her soul revealed to all but he. (But he still loves me) her world is all blue and black the delicate features of her face marred by his unyielding love of her her eyes closed in pain, to the world without. (Is this what love is?) Opening her eyes she sees in the night the light of the stars; the light of forgotten dreams so close but forever out of reach. (I've given everything for him) His breathing quickens, the thunder of footfalls pound relentlessly in her ears the jewels of her soul stare to the heavens rimmed in the waters of silence. (I'll endure for my love) head bowed in defeat as he crashes into the room he takes his love out on her again her hand reaching, grasping for those stars. By the by, I'll be starting on my book soon, I figure I'll try writing the first chapter over Thanksgiving break.I don't have much yet but a simple outline and the title. It's called "Dignitas". Bonus points  1 point = meaning of the word? 5 points= what language? 15 points = who was this word important to and why? Catch u all soon. ex animo, Aaron Woodside There are no great men, only men in great circumstances. |
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CloudedDreams Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 210My Fantasy Realm |
That is wonderful, truly wonderful. i am sorry to say that I cannot answer your questions though. I love the poem, it is surreal and touching, the magic is that you feel the lostness and depravation of the girl. wonderful work! Good luck on your book!! ^.^ Yes there will be tommorrow, but will you be there to greet it? |
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StellarChica Member
since 2002-07-06
Posts 207floating down a river... |
Great great poem. I looooved it. Good luck with your book. |
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lildevil Junior Member
since 2002-11-21
Posts 47missouri,usa |
O MY GOD THAT WAS GREAT I HAVE NEVER READ ANY THING LIKE IT NEEDLESS TO SAY BY READING THIS AND THE LOGS YOU HAVE GAVE OTHER POETS YOU HOLD NOTHING BACK THAT WAS AWSOME O AND GOOD LUCK WITH THE BOOK |
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Alyssa
since 2001-05-30
Posts 385IM ENGAGED!!!!! |
Aaron! omg hey this was great buddy check ur email ok? love ya! Tis better to have loved and lost, then to have never loved at all... |
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PrincessNets Member
since 2002-10-30
Posts 103NewYork, USA |
I truly loved this poem. I like the fact that in this poem the girl's despair is so real that when you are reading the poem, you want to cry yourself. Great write! Good luck with your book! -Jeanette- |
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