Loneliness, Sweet Loneliness

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Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

0 posted 2002-11-22 07:53 AM

Loneliness, sweet loneliness,
And here I am again,
Writing words to no one,
And chewing on my pen,

Empty of emotion,
And yet so damned forlorn,
I’m desperately hunting roses,
And only finding thorns.

Romance died in lovers’ arms,
And now I’m all alone,
A romantic lacking romance,
And a fool without a throne.

And last of all, a poet
Who has lost his will to rhyme,
And left himself to wish for things,
That vanished with his prime.

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Horrible excuse for a poem...but at least it's a poem.

-An Annoyed Adam

Stained Glass
Junior Member

since 2002-11-14

Posts 10
Why Georgia

1 posted 2002-11-22 12:57 PM

"Loneliness, sweet loneliness,"

I really liked that opening, it struck a chord with me. I didn't think the poem was too bad, I've felt like that for quite awhile. But now I'm starting to write again and things are going better. If you wrote that as a personal poem, I hope you can begin to write things you are pleased with again!

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

2 posted 2002-11-22 09:33 PM

Only ONE person has replied to your post?! Jeez! FOR SHAME ALL OF YOUR PIPTALK POETS!!!
For, Kosetsu is an 'elder' here at PiP! So read...and learn, you fledglings! (Kiddin' y'all!)

Anyways, I didn't find this poem bad at all! I just found it...rather Shakespearish! And if you didn't already know, I'm rather fond of the guy...so yeah!

Your post has inspired me to make a new poem and post it myself...*nods* Hopefully see more from you, Adam!

Tyhla du dra piyd uv so seht!

Kosetsu
Member

since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

3 posted 2002-11-22 10:17 PM

An 'elder'? Err...whatever Alex. I haven't been here half as long as some people..

-Adam

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

4 posted 2002-11-23 01:43 AM

She hands a guy a spaceship
so he can get away
to leave behind all the pain and... unpoetness...
and to have a clingon named Rhonda

Sorry, got a little carried away there, but I hope it made you smile, my friend. You know you can always talk to me, right?

No, on second thought, let's not go to Camelot.
~ Arthur (Monty Python Search for the Holy Grail)

aaron woodside
Member

since 2001-09-26

Posts 256

5 posted 2002-11-23 02:07 AM

I'll say ur an elder. You were here before me.

The second stanza...
"Empty of emotion,
And yet so damned forlorn,
I’m desperately hunting roses,
And only finding thorns"
...was what did it for me in this poem. Roses and Thorns. How to find the first without grabbing a handful of the second, now that is lifes greatest mystery.

ex animo,
Aaron Woodside

There are no great men, only men in great circumstances.

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