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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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theres no more understanding im not staying around any longer the sun has set the moon has exploded im ready to give up i dont care what you say the oceans are rolling my heart is breaking already broken how about it? could you forget me? tommrow? i would the world goes black the blood flows the sky used to be so blue..... Regina |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
this doesn't seem to have your usual touch of..anger, for lack of a better word. it's actually sad and disheartening xX; i liked your usage of imagery in this, 'the moon has exploded,'the world goes black,' etc. it really brought an element to the piece that made it worldly almost. like this could be anyone, anywhere. as for giving up...there's sometimes nothing else that you can do, even as it kills you inside. i hope youre ok Regina. *hugs* “A single choice can build destinies, or destroy them.” |
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OtherSideOfTheMirror Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 245 |
Well I'm really bringing out something old but I'm SOOOOOOOO bored so I'm going through and reading things... and i REALLY liked this. I haven't seen anything else that I can remember but this was really good!!! |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hey ina, this was crazy sad, but still true..if that makes sense. the last line was so damn great, cuz as you were reading it you were like 'wow, isn't this depressing!" but then you get to 'the sky used to be so blue...' and it makes it worth it. thanks for sharing. -bergundy- "crack my head open, on your kitchen floor. to prove to you, that i have brains." -Alkaline Trio |
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Poet on Acid Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 325Florida, USA |
hey, it's Tony. I will contact you later on in February. I have a long story to tell you as to why I haven't been online in a long time. I talk to you later Love Tony. ~P.O.A.~ |
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PoetryIsLife 
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Mmmmmmm.... a tasty, tasty piece here, Regina.  I throroughly enjoyed this poetic offering.Great imagery. Useing 'break' in one line and the immediate following one sort of bugged me, and could you forget me, the could didn't fit the sound of the poem up to that point. That said, this is a fav of mine of tonight's reading. I'm Titus, by the way, if you don't recognize me. ~Titus Es ist gut, daß das Leben die Toten studieren sollte. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
quote: Wow, this peice is very well written and as the quote above shows extremely dramatic, I kind of felt that it wasn't over the top and that there was a balance, which was nice to read. Anyway thanks for sharing such a great peice of writing Andrew |
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poohbear19 Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 94Colorado, USA |
This is a very good poem, such good imagery and very heartfelt good job and keep writing. Andrea |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
thanks everyone for your replies..its very weird to see an old piece back up their...well anyways..thx again Regina "heaven truley knows that thou art false as hell...one that loved not wisely,but too well..she swore..'twas a strange ,'twas passing strange"-othello |
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lonelyone2032 Junior Member
since 2002-11-17
Posts 13 |
wow regina! i thought this was such a good poem. i hope to read another poem that was this good from u soon! much luv, *Ash* |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Very strong poem ina You really got your emotions through on this oneStanding on the edge of the world |
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