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MissunderstoodGrrl
Junior Member

since 2002-08-24

Posts 27
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2002-09-21 10:14 AM

"Emotions on my mind"

That day we met
is one i wish to forget
I saw your face
my mind could not erase
You were always on my mind
but now i wish i was blind
I wish i never knew you
i know you wish this to
You as my friend
was all just pretend
You played with my emotions
with all your words and notions
Iv'e been through this before
i cant haddle it no more
I cant stand to see your face
i want to run away and leave no trace
There's so much i wish i could say
but because of me you stay away
I have so much anger inside
because of you i wish i could hide
I love you so much and it hurts so bad
i now stay away from you and i know your glad
I wish i could say goodbye
but when i look at you i start to cry
I'll keep you in my heart forever
one day i hope we will be together
~September 19 2002~
~Tiffany loxton~

-:¦:-Hey god i know i'm just a dot in this world
Have you forgot about me?-:¦:-

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

1 posted 2002-09-21 12:19 PM

Well well, Miss Loxton! Quite the emotional overload you've shown here.

There's so much confusion that it's almost baffling... you spin your emotions in so many different directions, and give an unsettling conclusion...

What a strange poem... nonetheless, a good write.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

LadyDracaWolf
Member

since 2002-09-19

Posts 73
CA

2 posted 2002-09-21 11:22 PM

I have often been told that overemotion is a sign of weakness. I dissented that argument, and many times proved my point. Emotion is how you see it. But not all of it is simple. Sometimes it warms and sometimes it hurts, but it is the hurt that makes us strong.
This poem...however strange it is...is saturated...permeated by emotion, but is strong.

Death is not extinguishing the light;
it is putting out the lamp
because the dawn has come.

Rabindranath Tagore
Poet, Philosopher, Nobel Laurea

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

3 posted 2002-10-16 02:15 AM

i do agree with brian. this piece goes in so many different directions. but it was a good write, and i enjoyed it.

and because i always add stupid comments, i had to tell you this. i love your last name. can we trade? mine sucks. i'll even throw in a chocolate pudding!! how about it?

/jen/

at first i wondered why white oleander was in the six dollar bargain bin.

and then i read it.

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2002-10-16 06:46 PM

This poem was pretty good. The basic theme, though, was a bit unclear to me. The whole poem states that you basically dislike this person for what he did, and then you state that regardless you'd like to be with him. Am I correct?

I don't know hehe.

anyway, nicely done on this.

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