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devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

0 posted 2002-11-09 11:15 AM

I am so confused
What did I do to you?
This life is so messed up
It is beginning to corrupt
ME
I feel like I`m alone
I`m a stranger to my home
When will I comprehend
When will some one send
ME
An answer

Alone Afraid n' Away
Junior Member

since 2002-10-28

Posts 19

1 posted 2002-11-09 11:40 AM

Allison........ This one was pretty good but not one of your best (even though they're all pretty good) DUDE!!

dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

2 posted 2002-11-09 12:08 PM

hey,
this was good i like the whole me thing but i g2g so i cant write anymore
~sam~

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

3 posted 2002-11-09 05:10 PM

Um...not really sure about the ME, it kinda hurt my eyes to read it. It was like bang. It hurt. Anyways, otherwise it was ok.

Ri

~*I found how to laugh, forgot how to smile, somehow your words, make it all worthwhile*~

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

4 posted 2002-11-10 01:15 AM

I'm not sure about the function of "ME" in this poem. What is the real purpose of it? Are you trying to draw attention to yourself as the focus of the poem? The main concern?

Parasite

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
~Aldous Huxley

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

5 posted 2002-11-10 10:57 AM

LP-I have no idea! LOL

*Allison*

Alone Afraid n' Away
Junior Member

since 2002-10-28

Posts 19

6 posted 2002-11-10 10:34 PM

Ok i have to agree with LP and Riley "ME" was to .....BAM but again it was good

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

7 posted 2002-11-14 03:14 PM

Allison~
I have to say that I do like this piece.
I could feel the frustration as I read,
and I thought the use of 'ME' was very
effective in this case.
Well done.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

8 posted 2002-11-14 08:46 PM

Omg I love this, Ali! (if i can call u that

)
Did you see Jon give me a hug? lol..
yea.. i really need to shtu up, man. I'm annoying people.
GOD! at the basketball game you and Catie were both screaming in my ears!!
Lol.. me and Sam (R) were going to kick that "mega" in the head. (it's an inside joke)

Ne way.. unlike veryone else- i kinda like the you the ME stuck out. Kinda made this seem like a song... but a REALLY short one. heh.

Sorry for rambling.
talk to u tomorrow.. maybe i'll have sum more J stories for you- oh yea, i'm shutting up, i forgot!!
lol... you guys all had to make noise..

you're all so immature!!!!!!!

GOD, okay, now i'm done.

C ya tomorrow,

Sara

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

9 posted 2002-11-14 09:27 PM

Yea...The purpose of "ME" was just to kinda show its importance...Do you get me?

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