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StellarChica Member
since 2002-07-06
Posts 207floating down a river... |
Wear that bright yellow sweatshirt, You're like the sun. If I stare too long, I might go blind. . . I stared too long. Now I can't see, What it was I saw in you. ((Maybe it was your blue-green eyes...)) You know what? You're way too beautiful. "They say you need to pray if you wanna go to heaven. They never tell you what to say when your whole life has gone to hell."-Brand New |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
OMG!! My guy 'friend' guy has REALLY pretty blue-green eyes! how sexy! lol great poem... i understand this completly. awww... now you got me thinkin about him! thanks.  keep writing !sara! |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
by the way- cool signature. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
Not your best, but was a somewhat enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing Erin. Are you scared? |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
I think your analogies were way, way too elaborated... you could have used the "sun" theme without making it blatantly obvious. Just my opinion of course... enjoyed this.Parasite |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
StellarChica~ I really enjoyed this one. Nicely done.  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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