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Pollita Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 220the unknown realm of insanity |
This girl standing, The one in the shadows crying silently to herself. Isn’t sure whether life is worth it. Pain, Is the emotion that she’s been feeling. She wants to leave, and never come back. But she’s forced to stay where she is. That girl thinks, The only thing she’s good at is failing and making people miserable. She doesn’t see that all those people care about her, For all she can see is deceit. Hate is what she has known her whole life. She sees herself alone, For the rest of her life. She sees no happiness in her future. At night she cries wondering if anyone cared. But the answer she forced herself to believe is NO! She thought she was loved, But then she thought about death. She once was happy, Just like the rest of you. She too laughed, And forgot about her problems. But yet she turned into this person, And it terrifies her. What will happen to her? It depends on if she’s suicidal… That is the unknown! [This message has been edited by Pollita (10-25-2002 12:49 AM).] |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Awwww...Delaney, honest---I loved this! I hope the music I sent ya helped! Tyhla du dra piyd uv so seht! |
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anawnda Member
since 2002-07-26
Posts 113 |
is this fiction or a cry for help? anyway it helps to know you're not alone... this piece really moved me,it struck a chord, there are times i feel this way also |
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Darkness Member
since 2002-10-17
Posts 202The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies. |
Yeah thats what I'm wondering. If it is a cry for help... Then I have been in your predicament before. If you think you have nothing to live for your wrong just look at what you have written. Thats a whole lot to live for its just so good that you can't stop you gotta push all those negative feelings away. You know I felt that way but this has helped a lot. This poem was magnificent just like the others. Try to have a good day... DaRkNeSs  |
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Pollita Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 220the unknown realm of insanity |
Aww thank you so Much Darkness...I hope i'd help someone... And no it's not a cry for help anawnda but thats a VERY good guess! I'm glad that this piece moved you...I don't you what it is but i LOVE writting a sad dark poems...I sent my friend this and he was crying after he read it!...He said it was so unbelieveible true and honest... Because me too sometimes feel this way!... And he thought i felt that way again.... Which thankfuly i don't! ALEX THANKS FOR THE MUSIC....I'm listening to it right now!...And you loved this? Thats sooo AWESOME!...Ya i must say my writting abitity is getting better! THANKS EVERYONE FOR READING MY POEMS! |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
THE Delaney?  How to address a legend such as this young lady...  I was rather impressed with your poem. It starts out a bit slow, emotional, and factual discussion of the girl's state. Then the big "NO!" comes out of nowhere and kicks the whole poem into motion... from that point on, I read it much more quickly... as if it was a threshold in the energy level of the poem. I'm not sure, maybe it was just me, but I really like the effectiveness of that NO! you tossed into the mix. Very nice writing, Delaney. Great to see you back in our pages. Parasite Learn to place poetry before people |
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Pollita Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 220the unknown realm of insanity |
Aww Local Parasite that was soooo nice! ...But i don't really think im a legend... Atleast not that I know of. Im glad that you enjoyed the poem...and the bid NO out of no-where! I love poetry sooooo much i write something everyday...whether it's a poem or a story! Parasite thank you so much for reading my work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I hope to see some of your work sometime soon too!!!!! and I just know that there will be ALOT more from me! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked the poem a lot. Reminded me a lot of someone I used to know in highschool. Hope things get better for the "girl" in the poem.  This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'. |
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Pollita Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 220the unknown realm of insanity |
Aww thank you. Ya i hope so too! You knew someone like this? Cool...then i guess it was quite easy for you to imagine the base of the poem.... Not many people know the point of this whole poem...and well....you got to know me VERY well the actually understand it's purpose! |
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