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foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

0 posted 2002-10-21 06:45 PM

You said you loved me.
I said I loved you.
You said we'd be together but for some reason we're not going to.
I saw you with her the other day.
All that time I didn't know what to say.
But now I pour my feelings out.
I hope you'll listen and not shout.
I know you're mixed up.
But I am too.
Do I love him?Or do I love you?
Maybe it's best we are apart.
But we can still be friends like from the start.
And maybe someday we'll work it out,
I'll miss you and have some doubts.
Then we'll hug like that first day.
And together forever we will stay.

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

1 posted 2002-10-21 06:46 PM

hey anyone who replys to this,go easy on me I rarely wright poetry

but I hope you like it....

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

2 posted 2002-10-22 01:43 AM

hi and welcome to passions!!

this was a really good piece, and i'm glad to get the chance to read it.

good write and thanks for sharing.

i hope to see you around here more. and don't forget to reply as well. you'll find that you'll end up with more replies to your own pieces if you do the same for others.

::smiles::

/jen/

what if they gave a war, and nobody came...

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

3 posted 2002-10-22 09:14 AM

Hey Foreverwithyou welcome to passions

, I really liked this poem thank you for sharing it with us and hopefullly we'll be seeing a lot more of your work around here

Andrew

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

4 posted 2002-10-22 10:05 AM

This is pretty good. As I said with your other post, your uneven rhymes give a great feel to the flow of the poem...

Oh and I have to mention... replying is good, like Jen said, and another little unwritten is that you try to space out the postings of your poems a bit more. That way each one gets more attention, in the end. It's just better for everyone that way.

Welcome to Passions. I hope you enjoy reading, replying, and sharing with us.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2002-10-22 01:34 PM

Welcome to Passions! I hope you enjoy your stay here. I liked this poem. I thought it had some good content. Sounds like a complicated situation, I wish you luck with it.
Hope to see you replying and posting more soon.

This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'.

dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

6 posted 2002-10-22 10:07 PM

pretty good??? bahhhh j/j
this was fantastic
i cant wait to read more from u
~sam~

foreverwithyou
Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 204
Wonderland

7 posted 2002-10-23 08:46 PM

hey guyz thanks for all your replys it means a lot to me I will try to keep posting!!

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

8 posted 2002-11-02 11:19 PM

WHY IS EVERYTHING SOOOOOO SAD!?!?!?!

Ahhhhhh! I wanna cry, cathy! I wanna cry!
You stupid beaner! You made me want to cry...
AHHHAhHAHAhahaa ha ha ha ha ha.
omg, i'm high on life, man.
It was fun replyin to all ur poems.

have a nice life

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