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Teen Poetry #6

Blue Eyes

Tamma

Senior Member

since 2000-01-17

Posts 794
In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV

0 posted 2002-10-18 03:12 PM

*Sigh* I think I'm losing my touch...not only have I almost stopped writing altogether, when I do write, it always ends up being really short...

~*~ Blue Eyes ~*~

He’s got bright blue eyes
That always mesmerize me
They make me stop in my tracks
To see the love they hold
Looking in his eyes –
Just pulls me closer
And into his arms
Waiting for his kiss
That draws me ever so closer

*sigh* I told you...They're getting shorter. Anywayz, this was written for my lil Angel, Jeff...Pic coming soon...

Have you ever heard that "No shirt, No shoes" rule? My question is...Why doesn't that rule include pants?

[This message has been edited by Tamma (10-20-2002 10:15 PM).]

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

1 posted 2002-10-18 03:24 PM

Welcome back, Tamma.
It's great to see you writing and posting again.
Short, or not, I enjoyed this write.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2002-10-18 07:33 PM

It was ok, but not my favorite from you. I hope to see you post more though tamma. Your existence is always appreciated

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Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

3 posted 2002-10-19 04:55 PM

Great to have you back, Tamma. I hope you're doing well.

I thought this poem was alright... if you're having trouble writing long, maybe you should delve more into specific events, rather than general descriptions.

Just a bit of advice. Hope all turns out well.

Welcome home.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

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