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Baby_Angel123
Member

since 2001-10-12

Posts 63
Unity, ME

0 posted 2003-07-26 06:28 PM

Hey sry I haven't written in a while, I'v had a lil mental block

, but it's gone know lol. Tell me what ya think about this latest poem iight, Thanks ~Angel~

A Feeling

I love being with you,
and the way you make me feel.
A feeling like no other,
has ever made me feel,
but this feeling that I feel,
I'm not quite sure is real.
For I fear it's just made up,
because it's what I want.

Reach for the stars and never give up in what you believe in!

[This message has been edited by Baby_Angel123 (07-26-2003 06:30 PM).]

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

1 posted 2003-07-27 02:39 AM

ha ha, already doubting yourself i see. hey, if you want it bad enough then all you have to do is hold on as tight as you can. clearity will come eventually and youll be happier. hatred speaks from experience, he was in your position once.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

2 posted 2003-07-27 08:07 PM

hmm...I like it. But its bland. Try using creative twists when you can. ummm..it was a little on the short side too. That can be good if you have substance. I think this could have stood to be longer.
I liked the last two lines though.
~Lex..

kj
Junior Member

since 2003-07-28

Posts 15
Australia

3 posted 2003-07-28 06:15 AM

this sounds as if you're confused, just step back from the situation and stop worring everything will become clear in time

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

4 posted 2003-07-28 06:17 AM

Ahh the confusion of new romance. I must agree with the others- clarity will surface if given a month or two, you need to just try and have a good time okay?

Good job.

JC

"Now I'm convinced that he's heaven sent, and must be out of his mind- mama he's crazy, crazy over me."

Devils Angel 666
Member

since 2001-11-30

Posts 71
CT, USA

5 posted 2003-11-23 04:21 PM

Thats interesting that you still feel this way....
Well anyway...This was a decent poem overall. Lenght like was said could be a good thing if it's deep and meaningful. This was meaningful but not real deep. Keep writing dear!!!

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