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Peeps-Peter Junior Member
since 2003-07-19
Posts 14 |
I am a tree branch being thrust carelessly by the wind. In the autumn. I am bare, exposed. My secrets are out. Nothing is hidden anymore... |
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Star T Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 182Philadelphia, US |
hey i loved ur poem.very precise and full of truth i could tell.and it does feel like being stripped for the rtuth to be revealed. |
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Silent Evincar Member
since 2003-07-22
Posts 179Here There and Places Between |
Nice... short sweet and all so complete at the same time. Exposed in the autumn, makes so much sense. Good one. NJS |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
muh ha ha ha. well done grasshopper. |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
exactly...short write, but still a powerful message riley *the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time* |
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Evie Junior Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 15 |
Extremely short...but still clear and full in its meaning....maybe try and add like one more stanza or somethin'.....if you wish...otherwise....keep up the good work! Tiffany Evangeline [This message has been edited by Evie (07-31-2003 01:15 PM).] |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Rarely have I read a poem this short and liked it much less taken the meaning from it and I did both with this. Amazing work, it takes real talent to convey such a message in such a short space and the metaphors that you used were absolutly perfect. Very well done. ~Live and Laugh~ The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again |
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