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myke
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since 2002-10-14

Posts 3

0 posted 2002-10-14 10:16 PM

Alone
empty, sad
falling, grabbing, wishing
A time of regret
Me

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

1 posted 2002-10-14 11:55 PM

Cinquains; or "Conquians," as you put it; can seem very elementary... but are great exercise for people who are wrestling off writer's block, or just want to simply express a feeling or connective thought...

You've done that very accurately here... nice work.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

cherish
Senior Member

since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

2 posted 2002-10-15 02:06 AM

Hello Myke!

I liked this, but its sad that you feel that way. You're not alone here!

*knocks Parsite with a brick* Typos exist, it's why we have a word for it.

Are you scared? BOO! Are you now?

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

3 posted 2002-10-15 07:11 AM

A very cool poem, I really enjoyed it, keep on sharing

Andrew

quietlydying

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since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

4 posted 2002-10-15 11:21 PM

interesting exploration in this piece.

and long live the typographical errors!!

cherish baby, i have this continuous feeling that your little skeleton doll is giving me the finger.

i am an odd duck. that i am.

good write.

/jen/

at first i wondered why white oleander was in the six dollar bargain bin.

and then i read it.

cherish
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since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

5 posted 2002-10-16 12:42 PM

haha..."Jen...come 'ere my sweet!"

Are you scared? BOO! Are you now?

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2002-10-16 06:24 PM

Well done. I felt the essence of this poem.
Nice.

This post has been brought to you by the 'Totally Awesome Society of Puerto Rican Egotistical Sexy Men'.

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

7 posted 2002-10-21 03:24 PM

Myke~
This is a well put together piece.
Your word choice was such that they expressed
the feelings very effectively.
Nicely done.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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