what soap doesn't wash away

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wvplayernotreally
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since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

0 posted 2003-05-08 06:29 PM

The steam rises
Slowly I open the door
Step in shut the door in a rage
I grab the soap
I start scrubbing
"Wash off me, get off!"
Thats all I think about
I close my eyes allow my hair to get wet
All i can see is his face
Smiling at me, touching, grabbing
I open my eyes
I can still feel him
His large hands on my arms
I let the soap fall from my hands
All i can do is cry
His smell, his touch, his face
I can't lose it
"Oh God. Please help"
Soap can't wash this away
The water pulsing on my back can't rinse him away
I grab the clear handle and turn off the water
Grab a towel, sit
I thought he was what I wanted
now, he won't leave

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

FlyingCloud
Member

since 2003-04-28

Posts 151
A little place inside my head

1 posted 2003-05-08 08:46 PM

I think that this poem can speak to everyone in one way or another. I'm surprised this hasn't recieved many replies yet, because it is obviously a well done poem.

+Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.+
T. S. Eliot (1888 - 1965)

Eminem wanna be
Member

since 2003-02-04

Posts 52
Windsor, Missouri

2 posted 2003-05-08 09:04 PM

OMG that was awsome....i can really relate.....heh that poem made me understand things a whole lot better with some stuff for some reason

You can do anything you set your mind to man--EMIN3M
R.I.P.-Zandon R. Maddix 10-3-80 to 10-5-02

blackandwhitehorizon
Member

since 2003-05-05

Posts 183
an akward state of mind

3 posted 2003-05-08 09:13 PM

that is a good poem

Tabitha LeAnn
Member

since 2003-03-27

Posts 50
Kansas, USA

4 posted 2003-05-08 09:30 PM

I THINK THIS WAS A GREAT POEM!! MAYBE IT COULD HAVE WENT MORE INTO THE POINT INSTEAD OF SO MUCH TOWARD THE EXTRAS. BUT IN ALL IT WAS AN AMAZING POEM. IT SHOWED ALOT OF FEELING AND I COULD VERY MUCH RELATE. TO ME IT WAS ABOUT REGRETS OF COURSE EVERYONE HAS THERE OWN OPINIONS. I LOOK FORWARD TO MORE OF YOUR WORK!! NEVER STOP WRITTING!!!

CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

5 posted 2003-05-09 12:22 PM

Wow, Malloree... I hope everything is okay, I'm here for you if you need to talk about things. This definitely had emotion in it. I think everybody can relate in one way or another with there, there's always regrets that people make that they wish they could go back and 'wash away.' And there's also the other way, the more literal sense of this poem. Well written, thanks for sharing.

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

punkrockerrobin

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since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

6 posted 2003-05-09 04:07 AM

wow that's a shocking piece great job girly!!

hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and men!
cody saw some pigs so he tried to fly but he fell and went BOOM!

SilentTears
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since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

7 posted 2003-05-10 12:10 PM

This poem was a very touching piece. It really hit home for me...I can relate to it...and I feel your pain. You captured that emotion perfectly. Really beautiful job.

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

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