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The Butchers Bill (3000th post)
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The Butchers Bill (3000th post) |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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The Butchers Bill A whistle blows down in the smoke young men begin their work broken bodies cast away the death factory starts to wake churning out broken hearts on blood stained paper the slaughterhouse receipt "a terrible price" weighs the heavy butchers bill. Inspired by "The West Wall" a book by Charles Whiting. The death factory refers to Hurtgen Forest and the battle for the Siegfried Line. The Siegfriend line stalled the Allied Forces for nearly six months and is estimated to have cost and additional 500,000 casulties as Allied commanders threw their troops against the wall. Andrew [5thC]: Making you believe the unbelievable |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
hmm...i'll get back 2 u on this one, but i did like it...it was short and 2 the point...  You can close your eyes to things you dont want to see,but u cant close your heart to things you dont want to feel. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Dude, that actually reminded me of the coal mines in the Maritimes of Canada. Interesting how my perspective can be so different than yours. Congrats on 3000... you're catching up to me *grins* A toque IS a hat! And I have one! |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
Eh, somehow you wrote this quite morbidly... the imagery is almost grotesque, but quite admirable. You did a good job on this one, Zu. Congrats on 3k.  Parasite Learn to place poetry before people Before you place your poetry before the people. ~Andrey Kneller [This message has been edited by Local Parasite (10-09-2002 11:04 AM).] |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Well done, Andrew. Titus "My imaginary friend thinks you have serious mental problems." |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Fabulous job, Zu. I'm quite impressed with this piece as you've got some kick ass imagery happening. Like Brian said, it is grotesque and for that alone I love you.  Honestly, it's a brilliantly written bit of poetry. Congratulations on the 3000th post. Have a candy bar.  ~AF~ "It is far more difficult to murder a phantom than a reality." - Virginia Woolf |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Thanks for all the replies, they are much appreciated Andrew |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Short and sweet, just like a certain russain I know! Hehe Way to go Zu---like LP said, you managed to mangle every line, to your own grotesque delight! All I do, is think about you... |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is quite gruesome, but thats what you were going for! SO... good job! Congrats on 3000, my friend. I'm sure we all want to see 3000 more. Most of us go to our grave with our music still inside of us. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
OOo la la, the 3,000 post! Amazing Zu....you know I liked this poem. I liked it a lot. Hopefully you'll post more for me to like.......more. :smoking: This message has been brought to you by the letter 'Y' |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
 Wow, one gruesome poem you got here andykapils! And who said you couldnt write? *knocks your forehead*  Congrats Andypickles!  Loved the poem!
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