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Teen Poetry #6

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tornskirt
Member

since 2003-03-30

Posts 87

0 posted 2003-04-16 07:44 PM

i'm not better than you
i never said i was
i'm just better off with you
i gave you my heart
you fed it with lies
you threw it to the floor
kicked my bruised and broken body
there's nothing left
nothing left to do
i'm afraid of you
but i can't get away
i love you
don't i
but you hurt me so much
and i can't get away
for i gave you my heart

---
(i do not have an abusive relationship, this is just a poem on such things)

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2003-04-17 01:37 PM

I really enjoyed this, and even more once I read that you aren't experiencing it, because most of the poetry I write isn't relevant to my life, but ppl respond to it like it is...I really admire someone who can put themselves in a situation and write about it like its really happening.
Great job...
~LEXY

[This message has been edited by Lexy (04-17-2003 01:41 PM).]

karebear07
Member

since 2003-04-15

Posts 64
Texas

2 posted 2003-04-17 06:02 PM

That was beutiful!! you can feel the hurt. keep up the wonderful writing!!

-Kara <><

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

3 posted 2003-04-19 03:03 PM

OOO! I really like this! Nice write!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

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