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Ephraim
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since 2002-12-07
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0 posted 2003-01-09 03:58 AM



You don't really need me,
and I don't either.
Oh wait, yes I do,
because I'm all I've got.
I don't really need you, baby,
you know it's true.
We're there for each other,
but know it won't last,
sad, but it's true.
Or is it sad at all?
A facade for us to share,
a need to feel this pair,
come on,
let's avoid the truth
a wee bit longer.

[This message has been edited by Ephraim (01-09-2003 04:00 AM).]

© Copyright 2003 Bob - All Rights Reserved
jeffwillett
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since 2003-01-04
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1 posted 2003-01-10 11:11 PM


nice build to the ending...i like it
OtherSideOfTheMirror
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2 posted 2003-01-11 12:47 PM


Nice.
WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
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...Coming to
3 posted 2003-01-11 09:27 PM


Very good poem, great ending! I liked this one lots, well done!

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

cherish
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since 2001-03-25
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swimming in fairy floss...........
4 posted 2003-01-14 12:45 PM


'ello BOB! yer the first bob i know here...be proud

I liked this, cuz i could picture someone saying it to his girlfriend. Nicely done, Bob!

Are you scared?                                          BOO! Are you now?

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...in my boxers...
5 posted 2003-01-15 01:17 AM


Short, to the point. I like it, Bob.

Sorry I don't have more to say; I'm sick at the moment...

~Titus

"A life unexamined is not worth living."
                       -Socrates

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