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Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2002-12-20 11:42 AM

Purple painted fingernails
tap on the window glass
shattered in her mind
it appears unbroken
She kisses the doorknobs
pulls the screen door shut,
runs out to the car
closes her eyes.
She carries her umbrella
on a sunshiney day
says the rain could
come at any minute
it might just wash everything.
Gone.

Same old drumbeat stuck
on repeat in her head
her hiccups disrupt the rhythm
but she won't drink water.
If she saves herself
it will make him happy
He'll keep her in a jar
and she'll think she's happy.
Same old problems
she runs from her emotions
hides in the closet and waits
for everything to be
Gone.

She just wants to belong
just wants to be happy.
Can you make her happy?
It would be an easy task
if you would only try.
She just want to be loved
just wants to be made happy.
Can you make her happy?
Could you try?
Can you make her happy?

Same old problems she runs from
some strange outcome finds its way back in
same old fear resurfaces again
some crazy way of thinking returns
she just wants to be happy..
she just wants to be gone.

Leave her alone
the crazy runs through her veins
one day she'll run away
and that might make you happy.
She makes herself happy
by pleasing you.
Silence surrounds
the dark shadows of her eyes
she looks deeper into your soul.
Crazy and alone
she sings this song
repeat and start over..

she just wants to be happy.

"Wie ein Quadrat in einem Kreis, eck' ich immer wieder an obwohl ich doch schon lange weiß, daß ich niemals ändern kann." ~Wizo

[This message has been edited by Allysa (12-20-2002 02:38 PM).]

LTEvans
Member

since 2002-12-06

Posts 72
Lenham, England

1 posted 2002-12-20 11:46 AM

Nice poem. Are you a nirvana fan by any chance.

Solipsism saves us from the atavism of the Equalitarian.

LTEvans

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

2 posted 2002-12-20 02:39 PM

Yes, and anyone who is a Nirvana fan can tell that this is highly influence by Kurt's lyrics.... (Sappy in particular... though I was reading through three or four songs at the time.) Why?

I did not like the original format, so I changed it.

"Wie ein Quadrat in einem Kreis, eck' ich immer wieder an obwohl ich doch schon lange weiß, daß ich niemals ändern kann." ~Wizo

Local Parasite

Member Elite

since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

3 posted 2003-01-06 11:03 AM

Not bad, Allysa. I admit some of the content felt a bit empty for me, probably because it lacks a lot of your creative style... all the killer lines we usually see in an Allysa poem are few and far between in this one, which made it a bit frowning for me to read. I like the opening stanza very much, though... very nice lead into the poem. I'd strengthen the meat and butter the bread a little, though.

Parasite

It's amazing the effect ice can have on the world.
~Allysa

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2003-01-11 07:36 PM

Allysa~
I really like this one a lot.
I think it is very nicely written and
includes some wonderful imagery, as well
as several excellent lines.
Great job on this.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes
[This message has been edited by vlraynes (01-11-2003 07:36 PM).]

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