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Rainbowdust Member
since 2002-12-05
Posts 320Sydney, Australia 
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3... A ludicrous fight rips two friends apart A newborn inhales its first breath "I love you!" "I hate you!" "Til death do you part?" Rose petals fall to their death 6... A drunken husband, to his wife, does his worst Lightning flashes across the sky A few miles over, three die of thirst While other banks' contents rise dangerously high 12... A newly wed couple, sip champagne While an ant is murdered by careless shoe A star explodes into being above the rain The sun vaporises a drop of dew 24... Intertwined lovers in bliss on a couch Someone's sweetheart blown up by a bomb Father corrects his son's awful slouch A festival begins with aplomb 48... Under the shower, an unexpected moment of peace As a meteor collides with the moon Pent-up emotions finally find their release Mischievous baby throws down his spoon 60... Promises are broken and wishes are made, A cynic finds a four leaf clover Dolphins laugh, salaries are paid And one more minute ticks over... The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears. |
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CloudedDreams Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 210My Fantasy Realm |
AWESOME!! I love this poem. the spontanoeous-ness is great!! Very VERY good! Keep it up!! |
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LTEvans Member
since 2002-12-06
Posts 72Lenham, England |
Very unique approach, I like the concept of all that happening in 60 seconds, gives you a strange sort of birds-eyed-view perspective. Nice poem Solipsism saves us from the atavism of the Equalitarian. |
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rxyfxy04 Member
since 2002-11-26
Posts 54lil' town in Virginia |
i really liked this... even though you didnt ask questions.. it made me think of what i make of my time... very good!! RxyFxy04 |
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