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wvplayernotreally
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since 2002-11-06
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yakima wa

0 posted 2002-12-12 07:48 PM



Thinking of my world as an empty jar
longing for things of intrest to fill me
things gather in me like coins or notes
something that can I can call mine
I don't want to be filled with junk
But when your not filled
people can see right through you
naked, lonely i stand on a shelf
no one wants to fill me
fill me to the brim with such a love that
i long for, will it not come
will my jar be ever overflowing
i long for it too, but i doubt
maybe doubt fills my jar
can you empty doubt?
if you can tell me
i want to be filled with something useful

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

© Copyright 2002 Malloree - All Rights Reserved
CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14
Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA
1 posted 2002-12-12 08:25 PM


I liked this one, Malloree.  I liked the imagery.  Good job.  (N' no, I'm not talking about the naked part...)

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

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wvplayernotreally
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since 2002-11-06
Posts 215
yakima wa
2 posted 2002-12-12 08:29 PM


dirty cody dirty

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

devinechild22
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since 2002-08-28
Posts 571

3 posted 2002-12-13 06:57 PM


LOL-Cody
This was a great work..I really liked the imagry and the visuals and ok the whole poem
      *Allison*

CloudedDreams
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since 2002-11-23
Posts 210
My Fantasy Realm
4 posted 2002-12-13 10:14 PM


HTe imagry and metaphors you used helped capture the emotion in how you feel. Great job on that. Keep it coming!

Yes there will be tommorrow, but will you be there to greet it?

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