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Unabashed Charade
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Unabashed Charade |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733
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The diction, the syntax, the grammer.. horribly incorrect, regardless it accomplishes the goal of a basic poem--expressing emotion. Tear it up. You struggle to hide Words more malignant than benign My façade never cracks Salvage your pride You let your obsession blind you Pessimism clouds your sagacity I only did what I thought was valid Blame me for all that (edited by moderator) you’ve been through No one had ever hurt you No, nothing until me I turned my head when you crossed the line I reached out when you clung to edge Words stifled by your actions Entwined in a sticky web of deception The story changes erratically Word-games set the scene for disgrace Each day a new snare emerges No haven, no asylum You were dealt a bad hand My confusion unacceptable, My answers never fitting, Rules no longer govern the game There lies a void inside you Your dark abyss I cannot fulfill "all natural objects make a kindred impression, when the mind is open to their influence"- Emerson [This message has been edited by vlraynes (12-12-2002 04:15 AM).] |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
hey, i liked this one cant wait to read more! ~samantha~ "sometimes i just feel like |
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CloudedDreams Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 210My Fantasy Realm |
This is a very emotional work. A lot of anger comes from it. Very moving, keep the good stuff coming |
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