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Relaxation Requiem
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Relaxation Requiem |
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dj29 Junior Member
since 2002-08-19
Posts 13Florida |
Im still pretty new here......but my first few posts have been the depressing poems I've written..... This one however is quite different this is something that came to me while listening to my classical music..... Which I love  .......Here it is............... A calm night, A gentle breeze The high grass sways against my knees The crickets chirp in quite a flock They play me the music of mozart and bach A waterfall splash's into a lake And from this dream I wish not to wake But to reality my mind holds tight And my eyes are opened without a fight My breeze is proven to be fake Created by a passing cars windy wake My high grass seems to be nothing more Then pesky insects leaving my legs so sore The crickets chirping I find to be The annoying sounds of a nearby city My waterfall and lake whose sound was subtle Are nothing more then a mere sprinkler and puddle Though the dream I shall never again see The relaxing feelings stay with me And as I lay and drift back to sleep This memory I shall forever keep............. There I tried my best to remain with the rythm I created..... Also I figured I might want to explain this now... I chose the word "Requiem" because (for those who dont know) It means "A mass said or sung for the repose of a departed soul" and I am describing how the relaxation is something that has departed from me and therefore I write the poem about it Anyway....just thought id put that in there Hope you guys enjoy..... "I still believe, in spite of everything, that people are truly good at heart" ~Anne Frank, Diary entry from 15 July 1944. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Most definately a refreshing read!! I need me some of that relaxation stuff..loved it!  Kristen |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
dj29- I do, most DEFINITELY, enjoy! You did an excellent job of putting the dream into words and I found myself truly disappointed when the calming sights and sounds were being taken away from me. VERY well done. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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DawnG 
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
dj, I haven't had the chance to read your other works yet, but I do have to say I loved this piece. Very beautiful. Welcome a bit late I suppose to the Pip family.Dawn |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You took as what started out as beautiful couplets and twisted their ends. LOL...Enjoyed. Thank you! |
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