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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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You didn’t notice That I was your bulwark That I turned away all Assaults on your saneness You didn’t notice That I was the bastion That beat back the tirades That threatened your mind You never noticed That I was the buttress That held high, your honor From that, which would stain You wouldn’t notice That I was the fortress That surrounded your heart Your redoubt from doubt But, did you notice The abuse I absorbed Or was I just, merely Your emotional tampon ~wranx In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward". ~wranx~ [This message has been edited by wranx (08-24-2002 11:53 PM).] |
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misery_made_beautiful Junior Member
since 2002-08-10
Posts 36 |
A nice kick in the ass in the end! Very nice wranx "Aging keeps life interesting" |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
An emotional tampon! Oh my, Wranx... What interesting imagery here... I liked your poem a lot.  hugs and grinsLyra |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Thanks misery, for your read and comments. Lyra, sometimes, it just.....was. Thanks. ~wranx |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Your words flow nicely together..gotta love the ending tho! Sorry I cannot come up with anything orginial..I'm working with my muse on this one!! Kristen |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
That bad, hey? Good write, a yank at the end... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
KARI?  I'm feeling a little flushed now...GROAN...wranx...funny, I have used that expression before--and sorry, it's difficult to reply now without innuendo (blame it on the sunshine!) But please know that I did enjoy! |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Definately a "yank" at the end. Pure wranx style.  |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Whoa!!! I liked this!! Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
ha! wow Ed you have a gift for hiding a meaning damming heavy emotions with light, airy ones This, sir, is Outtasight! keep these coming, regularly BS I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I really like this Wranx....great ending!!! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
A puppet show with the strings showing. Enjoyed -- and that's the beauty of writing, that you can enjoy something well-crafted that is random and ugly in life (in this case, a relationship gone to seed).  Mikey |
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Tara Simms Hall Member
since 2001-11-07
Posts 87South Carolina |
Such a serious poem, and then that zinger of a line! Some people just don't know how lucky they are to have someone willing to shield them from life's pains. Then again, perhaps we aren't really helping them by shielding them from reality. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ewwwww |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Nice flow to this'n Ed.   |
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