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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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river songs strum gurgle stones as laughter perhaps's it's way like moving shadows with hands climbing lay down trees with cellophane branches you bring me morning in your hair smell and dawn flavors on your lips your eyes still speak of dancing and how our music was there where satin sheets were pizzicato I read the news of your shoulders and study your back story there by the window of your glass gown you smile at my hands on your words and turn me to your next page I press my eyes to your psalms ©dark [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (08-14-2002 07:40 AM).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Hi... I am liking the first line a lot "river songs strum gurgle stones" overall, a good piece of work... thanks for the read... regards, sudhir |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, now...this is rather heavenly of you, all the way through...and I know someone who loves her perhaps's just as much as I, so I shall make sure she views this through your window eyes... Good morning...:  [This message has been edited by Sunshine (08-14-2002 07:37 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
So you made pizzicato on the sheets, enjoyed |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ooooh Myyyy Yeesss. Good morning to you too Dark.  ~slow hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS "I press my eyes to your psalms" Just beautiful! |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
 Morning to you DS....you have my mind in wonder.... Lauren~  The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Sudhir, thanks to you for your consideration of my humble efforts. sunshine your comments are lovely, thanks to you and for the nice cup of joe too. Sy, thanks amigo, perhaps some bow strum too there. enchantress, thanks lil lady of magic, you are truely enchanting. ms martie, thank you for visiting my morning with your eyes and thoughts, slow hugs for days of smiles in return. lauren, dang you look hot on that scoot, way over dressed for this weather (grin) slow soft hugs to you babe. Thanks lots. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
You create an image of most wonderful rising bliss.. I believe you are a morning person Mr. D...and afternoon, and night, and highway and sky. Sorry..just got lost. Sincerely, Reg |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
regina. I do love the mornings, the damp unplanned of waking to a highway of sunrise. Lost? dang and I was following you. Thanks hon you are a smile place. [This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (08-14-2002 12:23 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) This is beautiful and passionate, sweet friend, I love how you make waves in your words, this is gorgeous, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
First lines, read of the river in front of my shack. After? Reverie. Thanks for writing. ~wranx The shortest distance between two points... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
you bring me morning in your hair smell and dawn flavors on your lips ================================== I read the news of your shoulders and study your back story there by the window of your glass gown you smile at my hands on your words and turn me to your next page I press my eyes to your psalms ==================================== Your imagery takes my mothy mind places it wouldnt know how to go to on its own... thank you for that. If all the tear drops went to heaven |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
noah, arrigoto my friend. wranx, that darn shack is a palace if you have such a river in front, thanks to you. janet marie, thank you for letting your mind be the leaf on such a current. YOU bless me with your replies. |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Bravo! Exquisite! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Dark Stranger - I'm liking this write. Well done... BC |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
sandpiper, humble thanks to you. much appreciated. bill, thanks guy, very pleased to have your review. |
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Indigo Senior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 602 |
On the altar of offerings you read eye smiles and partake of the wine sipping with religious fervor as I invoke your name. Indigo |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
and a bright good morning to you too DS. I was just wondering since I really can't quite find the words for this softly sensual piece if it would be ok if I just smiled instead? big soft hugs to you buddie... somebody tell me, please help me.... |
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