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That Which Remains
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That Which Remains |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
That Which Remains By: Noah Eaton 9/21/02 Silently standing in the ruins like the Parthenon Eroded away like a lost Mayan empire Standing like Octavian without five fingers grasping the scepter Five kings instincts buried deep in their pockets retired Crouching like a beggar in a Roman palace Even Dionysus seems more sober than me Feel like Charlemagne without a son Pepin to run my garrisons Not able to hear my own Song of Roland through the streets Confidentally I thought all our revels now have ended But I can't get to sleep with this pageant still going on Feel like a distant half-brother of Timothy Winters But when I shout "Amen!" there's no throng And all that which remains Are epitaphs engraved on the smoke There's no explanation to how time elapses But I feel untouched by this gray hoax Without any heart or remaining breath I seem to find the reasons come out in a chiffonier And the moment I hold onto it Is that same moment I watch it disappear And I go on, wanting to make good judgment obsolete Peeling to the truth like the meat of a coconut And everyone feels so strange around me They all seem jurisprudent and I feel misinterpreted And all that which remains Are the broken bows of principles I sufficed And the fact that I feel empty Without your harvest moon ironing these tears I cry... That always seem to return... Can you spare some salt? "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (09-21-2002 02:43 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Powerful words and very sad. Awesome write Noah. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"And I go on, wanting to make good judgment obsolete Peeling to the truth like the meat of a coconut And everyone feels so strange around me They all seem jurisprudent and I feel misinterpreted" Incredible imagery laid out throughout this entire piece Noah. Truly an excellent write. You've capture your feelings here in so many ways ... I've got pictures dancing all through my mind. Very well done (and I loved that coconut line above ... )  Best wishes, /Kit |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
well, I'm having trouble interpreting, because I forgot to bring my brain with me...I can't keep from heading to the rest of the house in my thoughts as I'm having dinner guests and I must remove the sty from the living room, kitchen and dinging area. I'll try to come back when I have one...a brain, that is. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Noah...my dear sidekick!! You have outdone yourself with this write! Your imagery and vocabulary are amazing! You are oh so wise beyond your years! ~Hugs sweetie~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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ThunderMage Senior Member
since 2002-06-20
Posts 812Canada |
That was great. What is life without poetry and adventure? |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Noah I love seeing your words grow and take on such beauty. Well done dear friend. If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Noah, such a sad but wonderful write dear one. hugs, Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice write |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I love your vivid imagery, Noah... Another lovely piece... Thanks for sharing your lovely word-pictures with us.  ~ late night chipmunk hugsLyra |
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Singing Sparrow Member
since 2002-05-12
Posts 94 |
wow, powerfully haunting, you are very wise beyond your years SS |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
My friend Noah, This piece speaks to me, not of fantasy, but of the depths of pain... As love can lift us high beyond all imagination...so can it crash into a hard reality. Take heart dear friend, we cannot lose what we did not find. ThisDiamond |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Simply incredible Noah ~ an outstanding write full of such imagery, I too have pictures dancing through my head...just wonderful. Bonnie |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Noah - all I can say is wow, and whoa... I feel a book coming perhaps, yes? BC |
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