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Forgive the Thief
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Forgive the Thief |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Rewrite Repost: Forgive the Thief I do in wile confess a guile, a A pilfered theft of a smile. Filched and laid away in jest and Blessed forever in my breast. The smallest sip of flowers nectar. For the feed of a bygone vector. Forever in a picture sown Fevers me when I'm alone. Succumbed to this petty pilfer. Purloined to be a lovers sampler Worth more then all of yore or Earthly things, beyond a door. Forgive me this heinous crime, This larceny of memory's chime. What I have taken in hush, Is but a passions fading blush. So faint, so fair that I did dare, A moments transcending flair. This trace of honey for my nest. This place of nectar in my breast. She loves me she loves me not. Is there anything I forgot? |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I'll share some smiles with you anytime, Sweet Sy...  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now is that where my smile was sent, into your pocket, where it's bent? Let it out and I'll smile some more and greet you thus at passion's door... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ I will admit the title grabbed me ! I just may have to 'steal' it ...  for it cause an instant inspire that would take my thoughts and splash my ink in a different direction~ The write is absolutely FANTASTIC ! You delight the senses of this poetess~ Cannot wait to meet you .... and that's a fact~  You are aware, are you not, that your penchant for fascinating stories affords me an intrigue that I can't wait to experience first-hand ?~ *Huggers* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful morning read Sy...with my cup of tea.. Then I'm off and running to take on the day. Hope yours is a wonderful one! ~Morning hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan,  Got some of yours.  Sunrise, But would you step through the door with me? LOL Marge, Hopping for good weather see you soon. Enchantress Good morning love, have a wonderful day. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"She loves me she loves me not. Is there anything I forgot?" Well, you know you already stole my heart, sweet Sy ... this is just beautiful.  Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You betcha!  |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
I thoroughly enjoyed this one. You write so beautifully. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Sey, this is absolutely fantabulous! I am keeping it! If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream... |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
*sighing* at this Sy Guy. Lovely. "two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Sy, your writing always leaves me speechless. This is just magnanimous. Hugs, Marti Every now and then take a good look at something not made |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kit, I guess there is nothing I forgot. LOL Sunshine, Your on, SmartChick As I enjoy yours. Gentle Spirit And you are welcome dear. Temptress Thank you for the lovely. Marti |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh Seymour, I just love how you expressed this, love has a way of deceiving but it is never a guilty thief and can always be forgiven as love itself is a blessing even of partial memory! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah, Thank you for the boost and read. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a good ending! and you know how I love those |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
To the sly guy Sy, I have no patience for a thief, They always cause so much grief. But what you stole from another's face, Brings us joy and that's no disgrace! I must say I loved this poem.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
She loves me she loves me not Is there anything that I forgot? I don't think you ever forget anything, Sy... You are the wizard of rhyme and I hope to see you next week...  ~ soon to be traveling chipmunk hugsLyra |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
passing shadows Thank you for the read and glad you liked. Larry C, Top of the morning to you sir and thank you for the read. Lyra, My little chipmunk I can't wait to meet you I'm bringing some peanuts. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I loved the original and I love the rewrite! |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
ahhh pilfering smiles and pedaling kisses? delightful write as always..enjoyed so very much! Cher Poetry is: |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Denise Thank you so much dear. CSKpoet Thank you Cher for the lovely comment. |
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