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Algo part II
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Algo part II |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever 
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I invite you to a universe where fantasy comes true, Society bustles just like ours, beaneath a sky so blue, The system holds two planets, at one time it held three, I continue my introduction, quaint to say the least. Parma was destroyed by mother brain eons ago, Now it's just an asterod belt but not too many know, That this belt of rocks was once a world that thrived in happiness, Until the day technology gave way, and wrought everything amiss. Motavia is a barren world, with pockets of life abroad, It's climate controlled by ancient powers, rusty, neglected and flawed, For most of them forgot the ancient golden age that was, As they climb out from thier hole in history, mired in spilled blood. Delozis is an icy world where green skinned people live, as well as the last Parmanians among those icy cliffs. The people there were happy, until the disease came, And rendered people walking zombies, who love to kill and maim. Legend tells of of a fourth plantet invisible to the eye, A world thats made of crystal hills and diamond mountains high, There remains so much to tell of these uncharted reigons long, So with this I leave you as my story ambles on |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Very entertaining! Still, your statement re. Critiques catches me off guard with a great deal of wonderment as to which part of it is for levity. But you see I'm hunting zeroes and that's what this one was, but to read and comment quickly it becomes a number one! If you're unsure of my meaning, look a ways down the board for "Goin' on a Zero Hunt," and you'll find the bent I'm toward. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, I'll seek the lighthouse evermore. [This message has been edited by VAS (08-17-2002 05:32 PM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Eagle Scorpion, I liked your description of the planets and the people. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
just to let you know.. this is all inspired by an old RPG video game for Sega Genesis called Phantasy Star 4. This isnt my original idea.. "Me??? Come up with an original idea????" nevertheless.. i love this game and this story so much i want to share it with you guys.. stay tuned for Algo pt III |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
the saga continues... I would really like to see where you're going with this one... should be Quite interesting |
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