»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #22
»
hour glass
| Open Poetry #22 |
|
hour glass |
|
|
Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA 
|
Blech methinks this sucks..you tell me..it needs work.. Mine eyes Face the morning sun Mine tears Trapped within this hour glass Saturating, Illuminating The tiny grains of time Mine fears Reverberate Startling each tiny speck of sand Trapped within this hour glass Mine dreams Sparkle and shimmer Through the endless void As mine spirit flirts With reason and rhyme Trapped within this hour glass... If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (09-13-2002 01:52 PM).] |
||
| © Copyright 2002 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved | |||
Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh my gosh, I love this, this is powerful yet so sad, I wouldn't change any part of it as it is your own feelings and are sincere and wonderfully said though my heart goes out to you and your tears and hope you feel better now! (sigh) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kristen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
||
|
the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome Cold hands means a warm heart |
||
|
Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
So vivid was your writing---you brought me right into that hourglass with you. Let's break out of it together--and get back into the sunshine! You lay bare your feelings and did it in such a creative way. Take Care Earth Angel |
||
|
EarthenSoul Member
since 2002-05-30
Posts 163WA, USA |
This is perfect just the way it is. Needs not a letter altered. |
||
|
bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Jeez, Kristen. You're as uncertain about your writing skills as I am about mine! Knock it off! It's excellent. Mike |
||
|
wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Very very nice, Catwyn Love the feeling inside this ~wranx In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward". |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
