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the gulf of space
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the gulf of space |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I wish he would have kissed me. I wish he would have touched my face. A fingertip in question mark-- a hand to breach the gulf of space. I wish his hand had rested on my knee the way it used to do... I wish he'd say he still loved me... I wish politeness did not bruise. Once he held my face in hands, and said I was 'his prayer'-- He said I was a lightning spark-- electric--birthing his aware. He touched me then, like no one else his fingers journeyed miles-- "Whatever are you thinking of?" He kissed my tears to smiles. I wish he would have reached across the lonely gulf of space. I wish he would have kissed me once-- he would have felt my ache. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (08-15-2002 11:58 PM).] |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I wish he would have reached across the lonely gulf of space. I wish he would kissed me once-- he would have felt my ache Oh how achingly sad and beautiful, Karen... Exceptional writing...  ~ heart hugs for youLyra |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
perfect meter yuh liked the gulf bit as if yuh had a coast around yuh |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I wish he'd say he still loved me... I wish politeness did not bruise. ============================= I wish he would have reached across the lonely gulf of space. I wish he would have kissed me once-- he would have felt my ache. ==============================   Ive lost track...is it my turn to clean the mirrors? yes..it must be..after all youre doing all the writing...even my muse crossed the gulf. If all the tear drops went to heaven |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
hey you....missed you Jan! y'okay? damn...I'm e mailing you--NOW! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Karen, this is so sad but beautiful, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you as I know how hard it must feel to be left behind without that special souvenir; I still haven't had my first kiss and dream so much of finally meeting my Joanna and sharing it with her as I yearn to talk to her so much! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
love the ending especially |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
I especially liked the end too. The whole poem was heart breaking. Very well done. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
You want to cringe away from the sadness of this poem, but can't -- you welcome the sadness of it, instead. I love this poem. Very blue. Very you. *hug* Mike |
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Thomas119gold Senior Member
since 2002-06-03
Posts 708Biloxi, MS (city by the sea) |
I enjoyed this as I do all of your poems- its hard for me to think of this as sad but more of longing. you would think you live in a big city by the sea Thomas |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey Luscious.... this is really achingly beautiful. Excellent writing m'dear. huugs Maree  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
can't let this one get too far away from the readers...  back to the top! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
My thanks to "passing shadows" for bumping this, so that I could read it. Missed this the first time through, witch. This is when I put a stack o'blues in the cd player, defocus into "Alpha", and wallow in it. Mmm Hmm ~Ed In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward". |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
large in the ache you fill space a hand need not travel very far to comfort your sighing is contagious brian |
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