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Into The Howl of Night.....errrr....Fright
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Into The Howl of Night.....errrr....Fright |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Into the night of fright and gloom afore the gate of crypt and tomb on steps of quiet and dread aplomb my search does bring a quake to be For was one step that woke the dead who now before me softly tread and wish I might have been instead some place alive and spright to flee With grin of stark and teeth amiss where once upon was placed a kiss and voice is naught but rancid hiss from tongueless face of nevermore. Sockets of the eyes stare grimly out into the distance glimly glaring in to the night dimly where sight does bring to eyes the gore The tomb so dank and full of bones among the rubble and the stones where only the door creaks and groans against the cold winds a howling. Into the waiting cart I dive in hopes of leaving there alive Yelling at the horseman to drive with my heart in throat a thumping We sped so fast into the night away from all the ghouls and fright till suddenly we stopped outright as the driver started shrieking For up ahead beneath the moon a shadow cast against the gloom a headless rider tall did loom from out of the darkness laughing Familiar to the eyes of me this rider of my destiny did point the way for us to flee into the gray of mist before Without a sound between us heard we fled away with chilling stirred past a dark feathered grinning bird on the signpost to Nevermore..... [This message has been edited by Magnus (06-10-2002 10:14 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Magnus, This is the best I've ever seen you write. I give you an excellent on this. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Excellent, dear Magnus, a clever write indeed! enjoyed muchly, ~R.T.  "I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..." |
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EarthenSoul Member
since 2002-05-30
Posts 163WA, USA |
Magnus, this is absolutely incredible!!! I've enjoyed much of your work in the short time I've been here, but this......this is amazing! Truly a master write! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry Very well done scaryness! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sy, thanx....and at least no one is saying they won't be able to sleep tonite....is goood... Tier, thanx...had to work hard to get the ending I wanted.... Earthen Soul....welcome to PiP, and thanx much for your enthusiastic remarks...Me smiles when that happens!! Martie....Thanx from Your Scaryness...ME! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magus darling boy, this is outstanding writing you have me shaking in my shoes darling heart. Art thou fair, art thou sociable, now art thou ashamed to leave me so? Of course you’re not for this is utterly utterly perfect writing. I swear darling boy that you get better and better. And Oh how I love it when you write like this, purely poetic perfection wrapped in the bone chilling scare you give me. I think I owe you for a fright night darling heart, just keep your eyes pealed For you never know what may be coming up behind you Wonderful absolutely wonderful writing I love it utterly utterly but you still deserve something for making me shiver As always Mushy    Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Magnus~this is wonderful! I do enjoy a thriller from time to time and you captured me throughout~ wink* Splendid verse!! Sincerely, Reg |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Mushy... The night is right The fright is near The moon is low And I am here Bring it on darling girl....I be a waiting.. Reg...thanx....hope I have not made it difficult for you to curl up to a good book or something tonite!!! Vandana, thank you.. |
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LilTai Member
since 2002-06-08
Posts 189United States |
Wow...I'm speechless (almost *smiles*)...this is incredible! Tai |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lil Tai....thank you...I enjoy this type of poem, particularly the rhyme of it...so reminding of a poem by Poe... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Barry!! This is an excellent write! BUT...you KNOW I am not going to be able to sleep tonight!!  ~Hugs-me-tight-hugs!!~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Sounds like a date I had recently... Just kidding! This is really very creative. As always, the quil drives the words to the goal line. Bravo! ThisDiamond |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Yes M'lady, I shall be nigh to comfort, hold, quell thy cry Thy rest thy need for day's break whence mine arms do thee take Thine art the flower in bloom with petals soft to the touch My heart thee hold in thy room in wait of my kiss, and such. Wake Up Nancy....It is not bedtime yet... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Oooops! Kathy, you snuck in while I was replying to Nancy's post.... Wow, Dr. Jeckyl and Mr. Hyde???? Like a date....Did he have a first name of Count....not like the light...drank Bloody Marys???? Just kidding...Yes....the pen and quill racing to the finish line...Endings are sometimes hard...Always want to write MORE...but alas....never more....(grins) |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Poe like for sure..my thoughts exactly *s very well written *s M |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx M. Sometimes I go off on a tangent and feel the desire to write that style..It is fun.. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Barry, this is awesome work! I think it's by far the best I've seen from you. You took a difficult rhyme scheme and made it flow expertly. Well Done!!!! if I may rain on your parade, though, try to change the rhyming words in the last two lines of the second stanza. The only reason I bring it up is that this is such a good poem. All of the other lines are great....don't let those two diminish the brilliance. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Michael....I guess that you are pointing to darkly and before? Now I have to figure out what two words fit and blend in...Any suggestions...??? Believe me, I accept this all as a very serious compliment.... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
'Deer....Now check it out...tell me what you think>>>>???? |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I was going to say shades of Poe. But someone always says it first. Awesome poem, any way you describe it. Sandra |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sandra...I don't care if someone else has already said it... I do appreciate the thought and the complement.... Sleep Well!! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
    NOW you're talking...er, writing!  |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Excellent wonderful 2 thumbs up. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Michael...you are toooooo much.... Thanx for the prodding....much appreciated... Loner...thank you, pleased you enjoyed.. Like the two thumbs up... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is magnificent, Magnus!! *S* I'd applaud with great enthusiasm... 'cept I'm rather enjoying the shivers you've given me on a miserably hot day. *G* |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Hooooooooooooooooo! Cor |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Beautifully written and absolutely chilling, Barry... Please re-post this on Halloween!  ~ hugs of frightLyra |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Hey, this was fantastic! Had to read it a couple of times... GREAT WRITE Mangus!!! jwesley |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
suthern....I am pleased I was able to chill you off a little bit on an otherwise hot day...thanx.. Corinne....Hoooohooo, hoo! Thank You! Lyra, thank you dear lady chipmunk....pleased you enjoyed this... Jimmy, thanx, happy you enjoyed this, and the two reads.... [This message has been edited by Magnus (06-11-2002 09:06 PM).] |
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