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Night Window |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Night Window What is the night outside your window’s sigh? Perhaps a lamppost star drizzles a light line there encased in coat of gray in day, now makes a halo at each corner and whispers direction to morning birdsong. Or, a cricket rustles in the leaves a song to you all drenched in sleep, behind your eyes you hear it as a lullaby, fenced in to yard a nighttime friend keeping watch for silence it will not let in. You fold the moon within your lips and blow out stars with every breath and in that deep sound of a dream they dance around the window screen . Your sheets are warm with length of leg as hand grips air then opens flat on pillow, grace is caught within the curve so sweet at rest I see it find a place of colored memory where each finger trembles into touch of secret place. The train is a friend of air in dark romance where snuggles warm a seat for two by window watching small lights whiz fast like firefly lit like summer dance in back yard’s song. From the curve of night tides turn, the waves break keeps time with a promise, for in the night just before first light you hear it tell you with moon glow things you always wanted to know. The night cannot explain to day the way its canopy like a treasure chest holds the key to secrets that in the dark the heart begets. [This message has been edited by Martie (06-18-2002 11:38 AM).] |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
A breathtaking poem Martie! Wow... I especially loved this: quote: Splendid images and metaphors!  |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: I hear this! |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
wonderful word lictures woven very effectively and engagingly by you. I really liked reading your lovely poem. Paul |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Martie, Karilea chose the stanza that jumped out at me... Love this....wonderful sweet poetess! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
You weave such magic with your words, Martie... another treasure to read over & over again. ~R.T. "I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You fold the moon within your lips and blow out stars with every breath and in that deep sound of a dream they dance around the window screen. Your sheets are warm with length of leg as hand grips air then opens flat on pillow, grace is caught within the curve so sweet at rest I see it find a place of colored memory where each finger trembles into touch of secret place. ========================= From the curve of night tides turn, the waves break keeps time with a promise, for in the night just before first light you hear it tell you with moon glow things you always wanted to know. The night cannot explain to day the way its canopy like a treasure chest holds the key to secrets that in the dark the heart begets. ======================================== I dont know which is more impressive...the imagery of this write...of the depth of the emotions that inspired it... I have said many many times...seeing things thru the window of your eyes offers clarity I seldom ever have in my own view... few people ever know the contentment that I read in that 4th verse  mothyme"It's not about having what you want ... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms martie you do some dreamy stuff lady can see it all there like if in the room enjoyed it babe |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ 'You fold the moon within your lips and blow out stars with every breath' The entire piece is just MartieArt~ What I'd give ... what I'd give ... for just 24 hours behind your eyes~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
You fold the moon within your lips and blow out stars with every breath and in that deep sound of a dream they dance around the window screen . No one does this as beautifully as you do, Martie. I love your imagery  ~ hugs of metaphorLyra |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dulcenia--thank you for such a lovely reply! Karilea--A train in the night...I'm glad you hear it too. Paul--I appreciate your reply...sweet words make smiles here Nancy--The train moves all over, especially at night. Tiersdin--What a lovely thing to say...very appreciated! Janet Marie--The most impressive thing is your reply. DS--Maybe you were...thanks, my friend. Marge--Does that mean you would get to have my headache too? You know I  Lyra--Hugs back...the real thing! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"You fold the moon within your lips and blow out stars with every breath and in that deep sound of a dream they dance around the window screen."  (smiles) Awwwwwwww, this too made me feel sleepy reading this just sighing thinking of my Joanna and kissing her in the starlight maybe this summer for the first time, your words always convey such deep meaning and beauty and light these pages, I LOVE IT, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
So very lovely, Martie! Wonderful writing! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MizMartie~ I'd take the headache too~  Me wub you~ *Hugs* ~*Me*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Martie, I have a couple of stanzas that are my favorites, but overall....this poem is certainly one of my favorites...by far.. Magnifique! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
The night cannot explain to day indeed it can't! Beautifully written Martie  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Martie This is wonderful writing beginning to end... "You fold the moon within your lips and blow out stars with every breath and in that deep sound of a dream they dance around the window screen . Your sheets are warm with length of leg as hand grips air then opens flat on pillow, grace is caught within the curve so sweet at rest I see it find a place of colored memory where each finger trembles into touch of secret place. The train is a friend of air in dark romance where snuggles warm a seat for two by window watching small lights whiz fast like firefly lit like summer dance in back yard’s song. From the curve of night tides turn, the waves break keeps time with a promise, for in the night just before first light you hear it tell you with moon glow things you always wanted to know.'' That's poetry! "The night cannot explain to day the way its canopy like a treasure chest holds the key to secrets that in the dark the heart begets.": Lovely work flower girl! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Noah--actually the thoughts on this happened on a sleepless night. Thanks for your always sweet replies! Denise--It's good to see you...seems like a long time. Marge--Awww, you're such a good friend. Hugs! Barry--Really? Thanks so much for letting me know. I wasn't sure about this one. Hi Maree--Thanks for the beautiful. Eric--As usual you make me feel special..thank you for that. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I see no mention of the mating cat howls or the fighting neighbors? *S* Your neighborhood must be better than mine. *S* I know for sure your vision is... Can I be in line after Marge??? I'll take the headache as long as I can take aspirin? *S* This is wonderful, Martie... a movie unfolds before my eyes as I read your words... and it's always rated E for excellent! *S* |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Between wisps of window sash come the torent of shadows wishing to steal the colors of our rainbow, but with the grasp of each diamond breeze, comes the palette of harmony if only we would pick up the brush. I have missed your poetry so ... but you of all people know that I have had a little "WINGED" friend ( scorched maybe, but still has the wings) LOL , that has kept me nurished with your works in my travels. Beautiful write as always and much much to see and learn in your words. Loved it and you as well my friend. |
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