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MidnightSon
Member

since 2002-05-15

Posts 312
between the gutter & the stars

0 posted 2002-06-15 08:52 AM

*i don't get paid to do this*

I've come to impress!
The one that's well-dressed,
well-rehearsed and well-versed
and thoughts well-expressed!
I can't just let it go
I gotta edit these notes...
can't put it on the page
'til I've perfected these flows.
And that's all you'll know...
expectations or quid pro quo.
"They're written without a doubt,
He's not really down an' out."
Another poem to please the crowd
"They're just words, they're not a shout
for a helping hand."
Don't you understand?!?
I need help to stand
and to be my own man.

This is what I'm like in real life.
I'm real shy, and my skin is real white.
These aren't unspoken words on a page.
It's a showcase.
It's my well-composed face.
These words are what i feel
These rhymes are all real.
This is what I'm like in real life.

I hide my identity and
write these lines in anonymity.
I'm not tryin to make enemies,
I'm just makin sure you're feelin me.
Nobody round here
thinks I have a voice.
Nobody round here
thinks I have a choice.
They think it's a joy
to stuff words down my throat.
I have to shut up so much that I choke.
I don't like eating words,
so I put my words in verse
While the audience laughs at
the pictures these words are worth.

But this is what I'm like in real life.
I'm real shy, and my skin is real white.
These aren't unspoken words on a page.
It's a showcase.
It's my well-composed face.
These words are what i feel
These rhymes are all real.
This is what I'm like in real life.

You may think I'm
just another funny guy.
I'm here to say
I'm just another phony guy.
Hiding behind a fake name with my pen.
Writing these lines on a page to vent.
Pen the frustration and
hope you know what I meant.
Hoping you'll say, "I been where he's been."
But in the end
it's just another pretty poem.
You'll read it alone
in the comfort of your home.
And you'll say, "Hey man,
I like your rhymes or style or tone."
On and on you'll drone
but all I really wanna know
Is if you feel how i feel...
you know where I'm comin from?

'Cause this is what I'm like in real life.
I'm real shy, and my skin is real white.
These aren't unspoken words on a page.
It's a showcase.
It's my well-composed face.
These words are what i feel
These rhymes are all real.
This is what I'm like in real life.

it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown

[This message has been edited by MidnightSon (06-15-2002 09:14 PM).]

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

1 posted 2002-06-15 10:44 AM

Midnight Son,
my skin is real white
and I hide in fright
making the rhymes
to cloak rotten times
so no-one will know
my ebb and my flow
as I write of the night
while my life is a fright
brother I know
where it is you go
when you're using your write
to hold back the night
don't think I don't see
or have sympathy
but only you know
what you do and you show
and when pen takes flight
you write what is right.

I can relate to this.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

2 posted 2002-06-15 10:47 AM

Writing these lines on a page to vent.
Pen the frustration and
hope you know what I meant.
Hoping you'll say, "I been where he's been."
But in the end
it's just another pretty poem.
You'll read it alone
in the comfort of your home.
And you'll say, "Hey man,
I like your rhymes or style or tone."
On and on you'll drone
but all I really wanna know
Is if you feel how i feel...
you know where I'm comin from?

Exactly, and you wrote it perfectly...

I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~~(Garth)

Morcastlin
Member

since 2002-01-14

Posts 244
The Jersey Shore, USA

3 posted 2002-06-15 12:18 PM

A very perceptive poem! Nice work! I enjoyed!

Love,
Bonnie

"I want to Live! Life is a banquet and most poor bastards are starving to death!" -Auntie Mame

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2002-06-15 12:27 PM

Writing these lines on a page to vent.
Pen the frustration and
hope you know what I meant.
Hoping you'll say, "I been where he's been."
But in the end
it's just another pretty poem.
You'll read it alone
in the comfort of your home.
And you'll say, "Hey man,
I like your rhymes or style or tone."
On and on you'll drone
but all I really wanna know
Is if you feel how i feel...
you know where I'm comin from?
======================================

I've been where you been
and back again
I know how you feel
sometimes its all too real
So we wrap it in rhyme
set it free in our mind
Turning words into verse ...
some say its a curse.
(you and I know it could be worse)

"Hey man,
I like your style"

ya already know I dig your rhymes and many times seen mirrors of mine in you lines.
Poetry lets us know were not alone.
cadence cool MS
jm

You ...
You are still a whisper on my lips ...
A feeling at my fingertips.

DV

MidnightSon
Member

since 2002-05-15

Posts 312
between the gutter & the stars

5 posted 2002-06-15 03:41 PM

kethry: sick freestyle.
"when you're using your write
to hold back the night"
thanks for the words and inspiring verse.
and for your insight.

gentle spirit: thanks for readin. glad you enjoyed it.

morcastlin: thanks. appreciate the comments.

JM: it is a curse sometimes , isn't it?

i see a lot of me in your rhymes too...it's creepy sometimes. but i'm glad it means you understand.
thanks for "liking my style, man".

it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown

MIdsummerRain
Member

since 2002-05-19

Posts 175
St. Louis, Missouri

6 posted 2002-06-15 04:05 PM

YoU arE SO gOOd

So tell me, you really dont get paid for this?!?
You intrigue me, my friend; your poetry awakens my own! Great Write...MoRE?!?!?
~Rayne

For in much wisdom is much grief
& he who increases knowledge
increases sorrow...
Eccl. 1:18

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2002-06-15 04:30 PM

I understand where you're coming from
and know how you feel....I just KNOW, okay?
Well said...very well said.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

8 posted 2002-06-15 04:34 PM

MidnightSon
Keep this write and read it again in a few years. Enjoyed

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

9 posted 2002-07-13 02:11 PM

I like this poem. Enjoyed!

Music Maker
Member

since 2002-07-07

Posts 152
THE ORIGINAL !!!!

10 posted 2002-07-13 02:44 PM

Yo! That is a great rap.
And I can see clearly where you are 'coming from' - Question is - Where are you going?
And yes, keep them coming - just love your 'style'.
Kind thoughts,
John

[This message has been edited by Music Maker (07-13-2002 02:45 PM).]

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

11 posted 2002-07-13 03:33 PM

Interesting...and I would venture to say most of us don't get paid to do this...in many cases it would be easy money...James

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