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mable_sue
Junior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 25
Iowa

0 posted 2002-07-09 10:28 PM

Drag

Her fingers were throbbing
on the burning cigarette.
I stepped outside and watched.

I’ve never seen anyone
blink so slow.

As her eyes closed
she took the drag,
and it seemed as if
the world was so releasing
in there,
As if someone were
kissing her neck
when really it was just
the calming sun
toasting her hairline.

Then reality unrightfully burst
into smoke
as she breathed out
all of the other world
into this rusted steel cage
surrounding
her ungenuine happiness.

Her head turned cautiously
toward me,
and I sighed
and melted
back into her heart.

Sometimes it is so devastating
to take that last drag.

And people think it’s the nicotine.

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2002-07-09 10:32 PM

Interesting poem but still liked.

Cold hands means a warm heart

MidnightSon
Member

since 2002-05-15

Posts 312
between the gutter & the stars

2 posted 2002-07-09 11:07 PM

a fantastic tribute to a dying breed of people.

ooo the thoughts you evoke in these lines... what an escape you've painted when both realities are neither good nor bad...but shades of gray (pun intended, i guess.

)
and that last line is a gem of a closer.

it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown

[This message has been edited by MidnightSon (07-09-2002 11:09 PM).]

mable_sue
Junior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 25
Iowa

3 posted 2002-07-09 11:26 PM

thanks midnight....I agree dying breed we are, but who else would be Mr. Marlboro vice president his new yacht???? I'd rather contribute to his wealth than give it to the government only to be wasted on needless things!

mable_sue
Junior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 25
Iowa

4 posted 2002-07-09 11:27 PM

Now I know why they have a preview button...I meant "buy" instead of "be" above.

Fingeroops!

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

5 posted 2002-07-10 02:48 AM

Loved the images, although it was a drag to read it satisfied something inside of me.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

6 posted 2002-07-10 08:07 AM

Though I thought this was gonna be about that drag queen Balladeer, I wasn't disappointed, this was wonderful

[This message has been edited by Toerag (07-10-2002 08:08 AM).]

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